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Oh Mon Dieu!

A hasty flinch appears
those perfect green eyes
gaze now out of hunger
a sudden lust inspired
from a precious memory

Delicate eyelashes
light black lace
perched upon a rosy cheek
awake and blossom
to reveal the bloom
of bright sea green
clear water and moss
golden light through clean air
those tender lips
luminescent, rouge and bright
from so many passionate kisses

Great bronzen lion
made of muscle, fire
thick handfuls of gold and bronze hair
A mischeivious smirk
parts ever so gently
full, soft, pouting lips
made to be noble
strong and utterly masculine
a smile full of heat
casts tender light across the visage
to reveal their
delicate purpose

Laughter
rich dark chocolate
carried on the chime of sweet bells
mingled with the roar
made light by the splash
of water over stone
joyous noise that knows
how safe it is
in those perfect lips

Eyes of sun and water
gaze as if lost at sea
lost at the sea of woe
and found on fertile land
eyes of moss and agate
gaze as if stuck in time
in love until time
refuses to pass

A kiss
that begins tender
and ends in passion
A love
that begun young
but will not end.

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  • sevnsyn silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    Wow..Very desciptive

    This has many well written pictures to it, It is very nice,a bit out of your style of emotions...Might this be a new path for you?.A sweet softness seems to hover around this..nicely written


    • Stride
      September 23, 2008
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      A shame to call it pride, but I do pride myself on having a wide variety of emotions. I simply find more inspiration to write about the less tender and delicate, not that I have no sight of the sweetness of love. Take it from Resident, I understand quite well the gentle ways of love along with the rough.
  • resident
    September 2, 2008
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    i love you

    waaaaa
    im crying
    i loved it so much baby

  • nevadapoet
    September 2, 2008

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    OMG...what a beautiful, delicate write with awesome imagery and strong powerful metaphors...a perfect entry for my contest. I thank you so much for the entry and wish you best of luck.

    Nevadapoet


    • Stride
      September 10, 2008
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      And thank you or honorable mention! I think this is my second contest, so it means very much to me. :3
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