Okay, so here we start,
from a quick nod to a good shake hand,
a very good stare and then a glimmering smile,
shall it be because on that moment,
the sun is shining,
a very nice day.
And so it continued,
that smile started to linger,
as your arms gracefully lay on my shoulders,
till your scent was unforgettable,
and how your eyes holds nothing but happiness.
Days passed by ever so quickly,
as we hold hands while walking on the street,
talking like it'll take forever,
glancing like we are lovers...
But then, not all things will always be permanent,
when she came, changes started.
You still have those glances but it never lingers,
you still have your eyes on me, but not in satisfaction,
but my trust wouldn't falter,
for I think you'll stay with me.
Well, I think that those are just on my mind,
and maybe you started to see things new,
and maybe I have to do the same as you do,
maybe I have to see other people,
or maybe, you just need some time and space,
with another?
So tell me if we really are in this,
that I may stop guessing.
To be crazy is the last thing on my mind,
don't let me end in the straight jacket once again,
please...
Author notes
hmmm...
hopelessly hopeful...
help?
A contest entry
- Breaking Free Is Breaking Me, Like A Cinder Block To The Skull by lowercase prelude.
4200 points, ended September 17, 2008, 23 entries
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understanding and amazing
I really like this poem.
No
I love it.
I totally know how you feel. This is full of feeling and pain in a way. Thanks for writing it, now I know other people feel this way too!
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~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~Awesome~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
Really good write. You did a great job. It's really difficult to find such talented artists out there these days, and I believe that you are one of those "diamond in the rough" types! Great and inspiring! Deliciously poetic! Hahaha! lol. I really can't friggin' wait to read more of your works! Keep up the great work and post MORE AWESOME POEMS like this! Thank you so much for sharing....again!
Again....awesome write!
^_^ (Cute, huh?...lol!)
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when his eyes wander you wonder
I like the intimacy about HHWWPSSP
not that I am PDA but if I really like the guy
I wouldn't mind lol
Salamat sa ngiti -
This is really a practical end which you have crafted making me to think whether it is possible or not..but yes at the same time..to live a life..it is the right decesion and right choice as well..a great piece is here..well done...
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I think the ending, where you mentioned a straight jacket is a bit much.
Other than that, this was good -
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heh, sorry, but I can be easily depress, so that m ight be possible, especially when it comes to things like this....
heh, tnx 4 d comment....
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