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Haunted

 

Dare not move nor make a sound
once you see this place
something so beautiful to the eyes
but dangerous ground to stand on
only the ones who are cursed go in
no one ever comes out
so many questions but better not ask
the cursed might be near to snatch

now lets turn around before it's to late....

Author notes

I made the background. Feel free to use.
Picture Credit ~ Google
Prompt is the picture 10 lines or less.

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  • chilali
    December 11, 2008

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    What a great background! I love the poem. A great take on the picture. It is very well worded! Love it, love it, love it.

    Much love
    Ylova


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    Oh you have made this a drk take oon the picture. Very crative indeed.
    Thank you so much for your entry
    gaylene;f


  • HpWICKEDangel
    September 2, 2008

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    "noone never comes out" shouldn't it be no one ever comes out?
    very catching piece here. and i love the images both visualy and word wise. thanks for sharng


    • Kari gold member
      September 2, 2008
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      Thank you very much. I fixed it


  • Demonic Beauty
    September 2, 2008

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    I love the vocabulary and meaning to this piece.
    Its a great poem, ^^


  • suseann
    September 2, 2008
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    A bewitching tangled web of fear eminates from your skillful pen Poetess.


  • michichoeret
    September 2, 2008
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    lovely

    great picture
    and loved text also
    but why fear flowing with the cursed?
    might be great experience
    and very comforting after struggling with the "normal" world

    • Kari gold member
      September 2, 2008
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      I guess that's because I was inspired in another way from you with the pic. Perhaps you should enter if you see it in another way.
      Thanks for the suggestion and comment

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