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Train

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Engulfed in steam, a desperate kiss, oblivious to stares
embracing,interlacing in a way which no one dares,
dainty feet that touch the ground, reluctant to let go
cruel is fate to take a love that needed time to grow.

Hoping with each tender kiss he will decide to stay
whistle blows to call a halt so hearts must peel away,
the train will steal him from her heart, so many miles between
soon she will be a memory of something that had been.

Just hours before their bodies lay entwined upon the bed
where coffee lingered in the air,cigar smoke overhead,
they shared a spiced tequila, placed a notice on the door
pretended they were married like so many times before.

She smells the smokey sex they shared and prays for a reprieve
inhaling one last spicy kiss a wish- 'he cannot leave',
he pulls away and tastes her tears a million words unsaid
into the mist she cries 'goodbye' a love already dead.








Author notes

I was thinking of Brazil when I wrote this...don't ask me why. I'd like to think that this being the last bit of the contest I gave my best and not wanting to sound big-headed I felt this was.

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    Smooth and tender, well flowed and well rhymed, yes Bumpy this is of your best
    Great stuff from a poet it has been a real pleasure to watch grow through the series.
    Sue and I want to thank you for your participation in this contest and both series of challenges we have run. There will be new contests coming, so please watch out for them.

    All the best and thanks again,

    Jeff and Sue


  • ronnica
    September 15, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this poem of such a sad farewell
    and so smoothe I had to read it twice.
    well done.

  • Bob Fox
    September 2, 2008

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    Hilly

    Just an excellent piece of poetry here that fits the picture so very perfect. Methinks yopu have yourself a lil piece of Gold here dear poet.


    • moonbumps silver member
      September 2, 2008
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      Bless you for that-Ooh well I don't know about that but it would be nice-Jeff and Sue set quite a high standard for these contests!!! xxx