I inhale the scents of Spring just nearby
And my heart flips at the wonders I see
I inhale the scents of Spring just nearby
Each day I watch for the flowers to bloom
Such wondrous colours splash across the land
And I know my heart shall be free from gloom
Each new bloom under sun's warmth does expand
Reviving feelings of hope, life renewed
Such wondrous colours splash across the land
The daffodils yellow, the crocus blue
I lovingly view creation unfold
Reviving feelings of hope, life renewed.
With gratitude I discover life's gold
God's plan for mankind is here and evolves
I lovingly view creation unfold
With gladdened heart I breathe with fresh resolve
I inhale the scents of Spring just nearby
God's plan for mankind is here and evolves
I inhale the scents of Spring just nearby.
Author notes
Poetic Form: Terzanelle - Prompt - Breathe
Terzanelle
The Terzanelle is a poetry type which is a combination of the villanelle and the
terza rima forms. It is a 19-line poem consisting of five interlocking triplets/tercets
plus a concluding quatrain in which the first and third lines of the first triplet appear
as refrains. The middle line of each triplet is repeated, reappearing as the last line
of the succeeding triplet with the exception of the center line of the next-to-the-last
stanza which appears in the quatrain. The rhyme and refrain scheme for the triplets
is as follows:
1. A
2. B
3. A
4. b
5. C
6. B
7. c
8. D
9. C
10. d
11. E
12. D
13. e
14. F
15. E
Ending Type 1:
16. f
17. A
18. F
19. A
Ending Type 2:
16. f
17. F
18. A
19. A
Each line of the poem should be the same metrical length.
Type 1 ending used
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Terzanelle - Prompt - Breathe by Little Feather.
600 points, ended September 14, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please Tell Me What You Think
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
Spring and God, nature and faith they always work so well together and fit breathing so well as well.
Your form was well done, though in your refrain line of "Reviving feelings of hope, renewed." You left out the word life and that shortened the syllable count for that line. The rhyme scheme and otherwise flow as well done and I see you went with iambic pentameter which works well in this form.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Excellent
A terrific use of form. So very well expressed and such fabulous descriptions. Best of luck in the contest.
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The scents and colors of Spring are such a welcome harbinger of the good weather to follow. It is magical to watch creation unfold, to realize that everything has a plan and we are just a cog in the wheel. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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I love the lines you chose for your controlling refrains. It is so true that creation reveals His nature and his plan for us. There is indeed such hope in spring, such beauty in that hope. You have depicted it here in such a lovely way. Such an enjoyable read. Thanks for this.
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