THE GARDEN CALLS
See this place in front of me,
painted picture shows ecstacy,
There before me lies my fate,
behind the rusted garden gate.
Rusted tight with tears of pain,
wetness from the fallen rain.
Return this night in my dream,
guided by light of moonbeam.
Once more to be a maiden fair,
with golden ringlets in my hair.
Skin like snow, soft as fleece,
heart and mind joined in peace.
Dashing prince to kneel before,
I the lover he once adored.
Bended knee, takes her hand,
for her love he takes a stand.
Against the odds and the queen,
leaves behind all that has been.
Two hearts now sing, rejoice,
lovely maiden was his choice.
A future now this couple plan.
wedded bliss, woman and man.
Called to battle, far far away,
then there came a fateful day.
Darkness loom, happiness fade,
death and sorrow would invade.
Now the garden, a burial place,
where once we shared embrace.
Now only in my dreams may I,
feel love that brought a sigh.
Gate once more is shiney, gold,
within dreams to have and hold.
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A contest entry
- Crows and Quills by Twisted Temptress.
650 points, ended September 17, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Much credit to you. My sincerest thanks for entering. An excellent image of fantasy and heartbreak, an a superb use of rythm. However your tempo was off in one or two points, barely noticeable however. Best of luck in the contest.
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.
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A beautiful fantasy piece that reads like a fairytale, except for the 'happily ever after' part. Makes it feel more real. Good rhyme and I like the metaphor of the gate. Well done, Poet!
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Thank you for the nice comment. I appreciate you stopping by. Take care. Sandy
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Lovely
Such a marvelous tale you have penned here. The ending was sad but added much to this piece. Wonderful image, wonderful words
You are just amazing
take care
Many blessings
David
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Good morning David. Always nice to hear from you my friend. Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate the nice comments you always leave. Take care my friend.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Ohhh this is so lovely, although it has a sand ending, it is a wonderful fairytale. Beauitful work and good luck
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The prompt brings the prince to embrace his love, dreams guide his emotions to kneel with the lover so adored. Happiness fade and lovers separate. The relationship is buried as thoughts of yesterday is all that is left to hold onto.
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Lovely Comment
Thank you Dan. I appreciate the encouragment. I never tried this style before. Always nice when my friend stops by. You take care. Hugs and Smiles.
Bless You,
Sandy
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