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Such Hypocritical Thinking.

Ah,

Don't you just love

the cold sting

of jealousy.

 

Ah,

But don't you just love,

even more then

the cold sting of jealousy,

the cold sting

of irrational jealousy.

of hypocritical jealousy.

of ridiculous jealousy.

 

You know its pointless.

You know its wrong.

But its still there,

isn't it.

 

It's still there.

It eats away at you.

Until you just cant stand it

anymore.

 

Ah,

don't you just love

the cold sting

of jealousy

that you just cant make

to go away.

 

Ah,

don't you just love it

when your subconscious

wants revenge

against something that

is totally irrelevant.

totally crazy.

totally wrong.

 

You want to cause

the other the pain

that they have

accidentally

caused you.

 

But that is wrong.

They did it to you

and you hated it.

Why do it to them?

So they hate it too?

 

Ah,

Don't you just love

irrational thinking?

The way that

you just don't want

to listen to your

conscience.

 

Ah,

Don't you just love

when you love someone

so much

that you cant stand

even the thought

of them not being

completely

and utterly

yours.

 

Ah,

Don't you just fucking love love.

 

 

 

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Totally hypocritical. Trust me.

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Great stuff!!!

    Ah, the darker side of love, don't ya just love it?
    Profound, thoughtful & enthralling throughout...
    Well penned, well versed, Well Done!!!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 27, 2008

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    Ah, those adjectives can be so effective. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.


    whisper

  • misterfish
    September 20, 2008

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    What can I say to something like that? It's brilliant...and it makes me feel special but thats for completely different reasons.Tongue out

     

    Well done 


  • KyleBerg gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Oh my god! The pure honesty of this work combined with your writing talent. Towards the beginning i was feeling guilty about how yes, i think like that sometimes,, but then by the end i was thinking that maybe its ok lol. I completely loved this poem,, from the 'ah' repetition, and then those three lines at the start: irrational, hypocritical, ridiculous,, absolutely fantastic words.

    One of the best things I've read on this site, thank you.


  • written-in-ink
    September 7, 2008

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    so im glad that i allows prewrites because this is amazing and i can relate so much

    love it you have no idea


    wooo

    thank you and good luck


  • SageyBaby
    September 2, 2008

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    My god. im lost for words. I LOVE this. Just sheer anger and emotion in the poem. So raw and so real, like i could hear your thoughts or you breaking down in front of someone and shouting this all out. GREAT JOB, i enjoyed reading. You're a very good writer. Talent! x

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