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A Kingdom of Sand and Dead Things

I’ve built a house of sand and dead things

Come inside and see

I’ve built a tower, queer spires scrape the sky

You will never reach the top, God help you if you try

Come, believe, be free…

 

 

I’ve built a garden with raw, red earth

We’ll see what madness comes

I’ve built a wall, its shadow long upon each soul

Each face earns every smile, harlequin and droll

From the gallows to the slums

 

 

I’ve grown a mind inside each mind

Look, the beast is man

No tumult of the scorned flock

For I am the herder, and they the stock

And all are as they began

 

 

 

My sheep are sleeping wide awake

Their lewdness is lucidity

All trudge and mud and weary faiths

If they weren’t ants they would be wraiths

Devout in clouded clarity

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest. A very unusual and interesting poem with good rhyme and a different rhythm to the norm, which made an excellent read.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue and Jeff


  • PerfectTonight
    September 2, 2008

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    I thoroughly enjoyed this piece! The concept was strong, but not 'cliche'. Your use of rhyme and rhythm was very tasteful, and it was tethered by a very REALISTIC stream of imagery. I do not write comments unless I truly have something worthwhile to say, and this was no exception.

    I must admit, I may like it even more because your use of rhyme, flow and other poetic device is similar to my own tastes, hahah. Nonetheless, this was great thats for sharing and making it worth my time!!!

    Something about this struck me....
    "I’ve grown a mind inside each mind"....
    I'm not sure about the rest of the stanza, but I loved that line!!!