one day, perhaps long ago,
I inhaled a chalkboard -
lessons I hadn't learned
spread dust through my trachea,
forming phlegm when mixed
with gulps,
& raised hands threatened questions
that regurgitation
couldn't answer.
it got caught in my chest;
your words felt chalky -
though the eraser was nowhere
in sight to forge
what you meant.
you were that student, who exhaled
sweat & heavy breaths
as you clumsily repeated
what was written
like it was what I wanted
so maybe I would feel for you
& tell you.
but you were simply scribbling
on the surface:
tearing your fingernails through
the blackboard in my lungs.
Author notes
I did find an image hiding about that could inspire me somewhat. 
A contest entry
- Invite Only! by Age of Rain.
1750 points, ended September 11, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Cleverly written...Imagery so alive...I will never look at a chalkboard the same way..though I hate scratching on your surface...It drives one crazy..You have such potential with your mind to create exceptional imagery! This is a classic and rather humorous way you have penned this one..Bookmarked!
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Truly amazing!
Such beautiful strong imagery and flow...so very creative and original...very line held you till the end...
congrat's on the well deserved Gold!
mystic
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Absolutly stunning .. Nothing else needs to be said
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Wow! No wonder you won gold - this is such a very creative image, it has a lot of intensity and feeling. I think "your words felt chalky -
though the eraser was nowhere
in sight to forge
what you meant." is the most poignant stanza and a great transition to using second person, but I love the whole poem.
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Your starting image is gorgeous and I love it. This is wonderful and entirely unique. A superlative work!
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This is ...
undoubtedly the most original poem here, and if it were up to me, you'd be carrying home the Gold.
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fan fucking tastic.
peace & love
xx Sin
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WOW ! this is one fantastic piece of poetry
Love the uniqueness and thoughts within
Every stanza held me
Best wishes
Julie
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