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Guidance


I struggle throughout this unsought endeavor;
Compelled by chance to ascertain my mission
Without aids for discernment whatsoever.
I suffer mustering to find ambition
And struggle to become enlightened, clever,
Intending to evoke my intuition,
To temper the soul I become forever,
Against the tide of flesh’s opposition.

Yet, I will not fall victim to complaining;
Shall suffer gladly destiny’s full torment,
Consider every wound part of my training,
Hold dear each break of heart I am attaining.
I'll tooth and claw my way into this moment,
Held fast for every second that’s remaining

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Italian Sonnet da Lentini – Rhyme scheme: abababab cdccdc.

Challenge: Use hendecasyllable meter.

For In2it, who is finding the going hard.

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A contest entry

Tell of victories over demons!

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  • Truetome
    October 14, 2008
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    congratulations pervirutous on winning the gold in this competition.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    We often face challenges not of our own choosing. We answer them or not, but we may not avoid them. The poet speaks of these as the tempering of the soul and determines to participate in the proving of his worth in the fire, hammer and anvil of chance and opportunity.
    The flow is flawless. The rhythm is mirrored in the fall and rise of the tone of resolution in the quatrain and tercet rhyme units.

  • Truetome
    September 25, 2008

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    wow. powerful... to "tell of victories over demons" that caught my attention. so thus is what your sonnet is about... quite uplifting I would say... to keep on striving amidst the struggle in life, and to remember that struggle comes 'with' life, as you stated in your writing, and to remember this on our journey, hence a victory is in that very simple remembrance, so that we may take struggle in stride. That in itself is a Victory.


  • maa gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    I'll tooth and claw my way into this moment
    one-eyed irony-man-avatar has stricken again !

    don't you love hendecasyllabic lines ?
    they seem to scream : "use all the -ing and -ition words to your heart's content !
    aren't they delicious ?

    beautiful message here - my cup of tea, again ...

    maa


  • Darkwell
    September 15, 2008

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    this is brillient! the will to survive even in the face of bad times. i love your imagery

    Against the tide of flesh’s opposition.

    is that aging? i read that as aging? sweet

    Consider every wound part of my training,
    Hold dear each break of heart I am attaining.

    in Aikido we say love the pain its your pain Sweeeet WTG Good luck in the contest


  • rhondasail
    September 2, 2008

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    Yeah, a lot of us find the going hard...and words like these are a draught of sweet water...thanks for sharing the spirit here, Allan...Love this one. Peace, Rhonda (hang in there, In2it)


  • echo-ink
    September 2, 2008

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    Lovely and thoughtful.

    I wish you all the luck in the world on your spiritual endeavor's
    Here are three bunnies to help you carry your burdens. Bell, xx


  • 2lullabyhaven
    September 2, 2008

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    I have to ride tails with Amera on this one, you are the sonnet King; Good luck to you in the contest


  • Amera gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    This is absolutely beautiful especially as it is entirely penned in feminine rhyme. When recited out loud this poem sings like a love song. The content can be a life message for all of us as this line: “Consider every wound part of my training” stands out being original and thought provoking. You remain the sonnet King around here. Three bunnys:

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    Brilliant!!!

    No one has ever said it better. And the truth shall set us free... Best of luck in contest!!! Peace, Cyn


  • Griswold
    September 1, 2008
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    Oh, and I like your new Avatar.

  • Griswold
    September 1, 2008

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    This is very cool. I kinda see/hear/feel what yer getting at. Besides all that this is very well written all around. That's why you dont see me in contests you're in. Scott


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    wonderfully done here honey
    Enjoyed this.

    Patience my dear patience.

    Love ya

    Passionspromise

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