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Sweet Shades of Passion (Villanelle W/meaning)

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Sweet shades of passion came alive in this rose

petals wide spread in season they bloomed

bud opens up and a sweet fragrance grows.

Down in central Texas a flower shows

various beauties being well groomed

Sweet shades of passion came alive in this rose

 

Aligned perfectly in sweet patterned rows

limbs brushing limbs the centers perfumed

bud opens up and a sweet fragrance grows.

 

Scent will travel wherever the wind blows

swaying within the sunlight, brightness loomed

Sweet shades of passion came alive in this rose

 

Deep in the center where sweet essence flows

like a river it travels until all beauties consumed

bud opens up and a sweet fragrance grows.

 

Within each petal a precious gift glows

brightening rooms with colors that ballooned

Sweet shades of passion came alive in this rose

bud opens up and a sweet fragrance grows.

Author notes

Contest Prompt: I have seen a variation on the Villanelle that offers a further challenge to writers not sufficiently amused with end rhyme, refrains, and structure... to add a meaning to the verses too.

This variation asks the writer to define the end word of the first line of each stanza, in the following line. But done so that flow, overall meaning and rhyme all follow the Villanelle form. http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/villanelle.html

Sound like a challenge... well, give it a try, I have written one as an example, and provided a link for a far more beautiful example, called
" Mother" by Marigoes [ which defines every end word bonus points for any who can manage that] http://allpoetry.com/poem/679412

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    Beatiful dear just lovely from the get go This is one of y favorite forms loved it!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    Excellent,

    Nice form, content, and flow Victorious!
    Thanks for sharing, all the best within the contest!

    It!
    Love ya, Timothy

  • mcfreeman
    September 2, 2008
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    Again and again


  • dannyjay
    September 2, 2008
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    very well done, this was beautiful. i re-read this and each time i liked it more


  • Amera gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    I adore poetry about flowers so this poem gets top billing right out of the gate. The Villanelle is a difficult form to write well without sounding choppy. You perfected the form in this beautiful poem. I read it out loud several times simply because it’s so beautiful. This piece is alive with the image of motion, color and fragrance. Absolutely beautiful!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sanshay
    September 2, 2008
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    Beautifully done, I can't write form but I would try if it was this beautiful.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    Beautifully done, each word illustrated as the contest setter asked, and illustrated superbly.
    Wonderful poetry
    Great writing.


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    Wonderful rhyme, flow is excellent read silently or aloud, has a good use of the meanings or definition lines to some creative and poetic meanings added to the tercets and final stanza, overall a very good job here, beautiful poetry. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK


  • Griswold
    September 1, 2008

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    Oh boy, I saw this contest and said I dont have the time or aspirin to make it meaningful too. Very well done sweetheart, an excellent job. Beautifully written...Love you...Scott

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