why do i deserve these points?
some people don't have any
but when i get those points in hand
i'll serve the needy many
i'll look at them and stack em up
count them twice then put them in a cup
shake them left and shake them right
having points is dynamite
if you feel that i am worthy
and give me lots of them
i promise that i'll give em up
to poets for their zen
i'll make contests big and small
the points will rise as their words fall
on pretty pages, contest form
the points will fly and storm
so give me points and watch me go
you'll be happy you chose me
when it comes to hoarding points
i'd rather set them free
Author notes
please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please 
A contest entry
- Want My Points? by pattyann4500.
3250 points, ended September 15, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very Clever!
You did a fine write here dear! I of course being a potential English teacher at one time would love to see proper grammar & punctuation, but you made me smile & laugh inside! I'll surely give you points. Obviously you want 'em.
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I'm glad to see the points will be set free. Nothing like sharing them with others. I was delighted by your poem; how cute and sweet. The many pleases won't hurt either. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest. Patricia
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Great work here
And some of my points are on the way to you and do enjoy
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to pattyann4500
dear pattyann4500, contest-hostess of "want my points",
I am symbolically signing this "petition for points" here and wish to add that elizabeth is an amaaaaaaaaaazing poetess, I have rarely seen such quality and profoundness in the poetic work of a 16 years old teenager ...
she has really stunned me with her entry to my contest "2012" called "ghost of time" http://allpoetry.com/poem/4310455
a masterpiece !
of course, her humility prevents her from telling you about it, so I shall do it in her place
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for me, elizabeth's poetic excellence would be one reason more to promote this wonderful young lady and to encourage her with points, clappies and compliments ...
thank you so much for your consideration,
maa
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I read the poem you sent the link to. She is indeed a very talented young poet. Thank you. She has at least made it to my finalist list. The rest is up to the others.
Patricia
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thank you, patricia ...
in india, goddesses have at least 4 arms and hands ... since 3 of your hands have already been busy distributing abundance in the form of cyber-points, I'd gladly be your fourth one sending extra pointies to our lovely young poetess ...
thank you for this great and generous contest ...
maa
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Nice write.
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Full of lively imagery, especially the part about putting the points in a cup and shaking them up. It's a positive, confident appeal for those points!
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