I
love how
nose to nose
eyes open wide
we gaze so deeply
into each others souls
lips sipping from each other
sweetest nectar as from the gods
time nonexistent, pure transcendence
heaven is home in each others presence
wrapped up together in loves embrace
all that exists is just us two
heart, soul and mind united
entwined in loves cocoon
‘tis a gift divine
Magnificent!
You and I
Become
one
Author notes
Double Etheree/ forwards and back
A contest entry
- Etheree Me Please (Contest) by Paloszoo.
625 points, ended October 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Let Me Think
auhhhh ----------------------------- hmmmm ----------------- could it be ------------------------- wellllllllll ------------------------------ just maybe --------------- is it ----------- wishfull thinking ------------------------------- Joe
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Wishful thinking? Perhaps. I'll never tell.
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Oh, this is so lovely!!! The beautiful thoughts so expertly arranged in a double etheree- one of the forms that I struggle with. I love the picture and the background they add a wonderful touch.
KW~
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Beautiful
A very well penned poem with such breathless depth
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Beautiful
This one has great meaning. Even though it is somewhat different than what I was expecting, it was truly an enjoyable read. The line that really struck me was "time nonexistent, pure transcendence
heaven is home in each others presence" I LIKE THAT.
Thanks for sharing, Bless you Pam.
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Thank you! I have been trying different kinds of poetry of late. I know I mostly write spiritual writes, but the love between a man and a woman can be spiritual too! Bless you!
Pam
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Interesting
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Yes...well...this is one of my adventures in trying other forms of poetry. Pam
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Bummer, you're missing a line of 10 syllables. Sorry, I had to pull you from the finalists. This would've been a shiny for sure. I'm so sorry.
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How beautifully sensual and romantic. I love it! Well done! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!
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Beautiful words and layout!
Hi, I love this poem, I found it extremely moving, and I especially love how you have laid out the lines. There is a name for this type of poetry isn't there?
Now going to read some more of your work.
Shirley
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Gazing into each other souls.. now here's a line filled with wonder.. only the gifted few can see so deep.. rarely do both have that ability..
Most enjoyable read.. it is so great to read you once again.
Ron
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A very petty love poem, enscribed in excellent form. A romantic double etheree that is delightful, thank you so much.
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Lovely,
I really like this line,
heaven is home in each others presence
Excellent art by the way.
Thanks for sharing you, write on!
-Timothy
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This is a clever poem
"heaven is home in each others presence" This is cleverly placed in the centre of a very beautiful expression of love. The line expands to bring that into focus. The ending supports this concept of oneness. The shape of your presentation builds to a climax and then reduces to the essence. "Oneness" I loved it!
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great
lovely layout. so nifty....
and wonderful picture as well. what personally really really turned me on was the "eyes open wide" description. so nicely totally shamelessly giving yourself and taking in the other party....
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yes 2 become 1....if we are luck enough to realise these encounters . lovely work P XX
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Pam
This is really brilliant, there's not a single word that shouldn't be where it is, nor say what it does, you've captured something here quite magical indeed, and congrats on the double etheree!! John
PS love the background
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