If there is one thing I hate about you most
is waking up in my bed && not fixing the sheets...
Man oh man, you make me weak,
no matter how hard I try to remember your sins..
You know how to make me smile, even worse how to enjoy myself for a while
&& when tears evade my eyes, I r/e/a/l/i/z/e/
you aren't there to wipe them away
{because you're only here when you're in the mood}
But if there's one thing I l*o*v*e* about you
is the way you cut your hair, they way you wear my necklace
and the way you pronounce my name [man, that's a total of t/h/r/e/e/]
3 more reasons why to love thee....
Oh babe, I'll keep on wearing your d*i*a*m*o*n*d* ring
until you beg me for one last chance
then maybe, JUST maybe I'll give it back...
[Don't forget to take out your cigarrettes;
you know the smoke makes me sick]
&& while you're outside
make sure the recyclabes and the trash don't c.o.l.l.i.d.e.
I'm tired of cleaning after you
I'm more tired of you sleeping in my room...
If there are a couple of things more that I hate about you
is the way you sweet-talk me out,
the way you make the i/n/n/o/c/e/n/t/ look
&& honestly drift me out....
Damn! I hate to look at you
every /m/o/r/n/i/n/g/, every day
mostly every night
when you tell me everything's okay,
everything is cool...
but babe I'm no fool,
you can't lie to me like that
that's why I h.a.t.e. it when you don't fix the sheets
because every time I ask you to s*t*a*y*
you tell me there's nothing more that I could ever give
[ That could ever make you behave]
&& of all the r/e/a/s/o/n/s/ you gave
of all the e.x.c.u.s.e.s. you played
of all the s*t*o*r*i*e*s* you fed me up with
of all the lies you ever told
[I love you]
Always seemed to make things better
when everything was meant to be worse.
~♥~
Author notes
"I hope this serves me well... in the future.. to understand the why I wrote this thinking about you, when the process indulges me to forget you. "-XXVampireeyesXX
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A contest entry
- Dirty Pretty--x by xstarvingartist.
700 points, ended September 25, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty Extravangaza! by Walking Oxymoron.
550 points, ended October 29, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Never Again Will This Hurt Me
Comments
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This is INSANELY good, so confusing.. not to read, but to feel.
I'm hoping the writing helped you make sense of you...
Incredible read. Amazing write.
And do you know what? I hate it when my friend stays, and she don't make the bed...!!
So Meh, something in common! -
this is just full of raw emotion, the dissapointment just seeps through every line, I love your punctuation, perfectly placed. Well done!!
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wow is all i can say...i liked reading this and glad i did. thankies for sharing...and i hope it all gets better hun
Dani♥ -
Nice job. While I do not think that I could ever write this style of poem I have grown to appreaciate it through reading yours.
Great job.
Mike
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