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eclipsed

drawn by her beauty
held in her spell
she
an angel of promise
me
a demon from hell

we all have a weakness
the stories do tell
with one touch
of her lips
my soul
she eclipsed

drawn by her beauty
held in her spell
with a promise of heaven
my death was knell


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  • Shadow Lynx
    September 3, 2008

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    Great theme, it flows beautifully. Some grammar here and there would enhance this wonderful write I liked the wording and the way you structured it. It oozes emotion and sadness also , best of luck