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Unadopted Logic

Blind men beat unborn
children; confused brains linger
in dormant states... hungry?

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Haiku about neglect

A contest entry

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 26, 2008

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    Painfully raw and well expressed, this is a strong Haiku that is shocking

    ♥
    Thank You for your entry in Stop Child Abuse - September & Best of Luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
    Co-Judge


  • Patpowers silver member
    September 13, 2008
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    WOW!

    Great message and a powerful statement. Good luck in the contest!!


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    September 12, 2008

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    Powerful!

    Thanks for this contemporary Haiku! It's interesting for me to see the 'morph' of something I'm trying to get a handle on from the 'traditional' aspect! This is brilliant. I'm doing my best to write Haiku/Senryu with impact without punctuation & a punch & it can be difficult. I love the way you almost keep to the 'traditional count' of 5/7/5 & accomplish so much! All the best in the contest. I'm especially impressed that someone so young has written such an impressive piece! Bravo..


  • maralisa silver member
    September 3, 2008

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    a brilliantly powerful poem full of raw powerful emotion from line one through to the last line thank you for entering the group contest and goodluck in the contest