Black tears fall onto pages you've never read
With everything i believe we could be
A thousand reasons i never said
Everything you meant to me
They say tis better to have loved and lost
Than to have never loved at all
But i knew from the moment our lives first crossed
In love we'd immediately fall
Empty spaces and empty eyes
Are all that i now see
No hellos and no goodbyes
No happiness without a fee
I'm trying to be happy for you
'Cause i dont want you seeing me sad
Putting on the happy face I always do
Is hurting more than the fights we had
But even the best actresses fail
And slip up from time to time
Soon im locked up in my lying jail
With loving you my being my only crime
I'm talking as if im fine
But youre acting so bitter and mean
You gave me all the signs
But it's not a side i've seen
Half of me still kills to know
If your playing an act like mine
Are we both afraid to let our feelings show
Can neither of us leave it behind
I'm not sure what to do anymore
'Cause my mind is all in a twist
There are feelings i cant ignore
By my heart you'll always be missed
Author notes
Me and my best friend Shellibee wrote this poem. It's about something that means a real lot to us both, maybe me a little more at this moment in time 
. She's the bestest friend I've ever had, she's always there for me no matter what the situation. She lives in Canada though, she moved here for a year and I wouldn't have had it any other way (except her staying here of course.) I'm so glad I met her and that I have someone as caring and nice to me in life as she is. I <3 Her So Much 
Me & my best friend wrote this, Shellibee + Second.Choice
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Black tears fall onto pages you've never read
With everything i believe we could be
<<< ill have to agree with dramalady the two of you write very well, i loved your opening lines they really captured me
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Thanks for your comment <3
Regards SE + LH
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I can say that you both can write very good, this poem has caught my heart and I can easily relate to it.
"Half of me still kills to know
If your playing an act like mine
Are we both afraid to let our feelings show
Can neither of us leave it behind"
I like these lines and:
"But even the best actresses fail
And slip up from time to time
Soon im locked up in my lying jail
With loving you my being my only crime"
Just in the last line there should be an 'in' like:
By 'in' my heart you'll always be missed
Just thought to point it out, not a big deal for it doesn't take from the beauty of the poem.
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Thankyou for your lovely comment Glad you liked it, thanks for letting me know about the changes,
Much Love,
Regards SE + LH
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This is just a great write, full of emotion with nice flow, well done. I love your comments at the end.
Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks for your lovely comment Glad you liked our poem,
Much Love,
Regards SE + LH
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WOW, this is so tragically sad! The heart-wrenching emotion just pours from the page, beautiful imagery, excellent flow. I like that this is so easy to relate to on a surface level. I think my favourite bits are:
"Empty spaces and empty eyes
Are all that i now see"
and
"Putting on the happy face I always do
Is hurting more than the fights we had"
If there's one thing I could be a little critical about it's in your 6th stanza line 3:
"You've gave me all the signs" This line doesn't read to smoothly and I would change either "you've" to "you" OR "gave" to "given" just a thought..this poem is still brilliant!
Thanks for sharing this, you two obviously write extremely well together.
Luck.
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Awwee Thanks so much for your lovley comment! We both really appreciate your kind words
Much Love,
Regards, SE + LH
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