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Breathless

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come
flood me to drowning
splash of savory sensations
wet, whipping with winds
fast paced movement
leaving me without breath
















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  • stavykm gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    Wow

    This is very seductive and a great sensual, erotic poem. I just loved it and best of luck in the contest.

    leaving me without breath

    Sounds fun LOL
    Thank you for sharing your gift to write such a wide range of poetry with me.
    Wishing You Many Blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    oh, my. Love, Lane


  • Gypsie Ink
    September 2, 2008

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    Shameless

    Inviting and indulgent. An intense write. Thank you for you provocative entry and best of luck in my contest.


  • arafura gold member
    September 1, 2008
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    Lovely sensual words. Leaving the reader... breathless.