I don’t know how the world will ever survive;
I’m surrounded by war [ever since 11 years old].
Will my brother ever know what it’s like to be an adult
not engulfed by war?
Will he even make it to 21 if he runs to the United States Army
and tries to be a man?
I hope he ends up a coward, for me
and realizes that it’s not about being strong.
It’s about understanding that there will never be an end.
I don’t think I will ever know
a life not filled with bloodshed. It’s a constant
damn ringing in my ears to hear
gunshots around every corner, around every fucking threat and every fight.
Is it so bad to be a dreamer? To envision a better tomorrow instead of
a more convenient today?
Because at 18 years old, I’ve been on both sides of the spectrum,
and I realize that it really is about love.
And I love you, stranger, I really do at this point.
All the nations need to know about one another is that
we all need to be reassured of our place in the world.
No one is as strong as we want to be;
no one can make it completely on their own.
So can we please just put down the guns and stop making the bombs?
Can we quit destroying all that we’ve built and
rebuild these towers with a mixture of multi-colored hands?
I feel like I’m back in 1960, trying to preach the word
of something greater than myself.
Will I ever see the sunrise on peace and love,
or will I continue to get shot down?
I have a dream, baby, I dream so fucking big.
Maybe one day I’ll be able to see my life not going in a circle around
nuclear warfare and gang shootouts.
Maybe one day my brothers and sisters will see that
love is all that matters in the world.
That your drugs and your guns can only get you so far before
you will fall back on your knees and pray again.
Let us rise up and live out the true meaning of our creed.
Because yes, sir, ma’am, we were ALL created equal.
Maybe I will be free at last.
Author notes
Last stanza, obviously, MLK.
Think about it.
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hey!
i just finished reading the end and that is not true
for if you take away guns gangs already get guns from blackmarkets so then we would only be worse off because law abiding citizens will not be able to defend them selves or others in dire situations -
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I don't understand what you're saying. I never said that everyone should have their guns taken away. Read my poetry more thoroughly and you might understand the meaning. It's not as if it's hard t decipher- this piece is very straightforward.
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wow
i didnt read it all but it was great (to long) but i am going to join the army reserve and i also needed
this because ive been trying to tell someone this since the begigning of the school year
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I found it to be touching.. I know many solders, and their wives, mothers and brothers. This is very well penned.. I really enjoyed the flow of the whole write!! Thank you so much for these thoughts and feelings. I know your not the only one out there feeling the same way. Just keep your head up and let your little brother follow his dream, You would want him to do the same for you. Keep up the amazing penning poet!!
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Little girls, big guns...War sucks. Any way, VERY good write!!!!!!!!!
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Thanks much for the comment on this...
It's a subject that worries me a lot. My little brother is 15 and wants so much to join the military asap. It's a scary thought, especially knowing so many people personally whom go over there and get hurt or die.
Thanks again for your thoughts.
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I understand exactly how you feel. I was 12 when the US entered this war in the Middle East. Now, my brother has been accepted into the Marine Corp and around this time next year he'll be in Iraq unless we somehow get the hell out of the Middle East. I never agreed with the war and I don't want us to be there, but I don't think terrorist should be allowed to get away with the inhumane things they do. However, I do support and will always support our troops who so bravely defend our rights and freedoms. As much as I'd love to see peace instead of war, I don't count on that ever happening, at least not in my lifetime; although I'll try as much as possible to promote the whole "love not war" thing.
I love the MLK quote at the end too. Nice touch.
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if only we could change the world with poetry, because the sadness and truth of this would be able to effect so many people, this is a fantastic read with a very powerful and amazing message which comes from real life experiences, just amazing
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Humm..I like the subject taken here to dicuss througt the effective poetry..It is very powerful verse as well...thanks for sharing..
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Great!
I think that this is truly an amazing poem, and so poetically describes the world right now. I fully agree with you that the world should just come at peace. But until we all go with God Almighty, it will never happen. I understand how you feel though. I would never want my sister to go to war, as I have no brother.
Also, I think that you should take out the bad word in line 12. Try to put something more poetic in it maybe, something with more meaning and less foul. I like your poem, but being 11, almost 12, the word hurts my ears.
Other than that, it was great. I like the last stanza. A lot. But what does MLK mean?
May God be with you and your family.
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I may look into changing those words for you. I think you might be right in that aspect. MLK = Martin Luther King, Jr. I suggest that you listen to his speeches if you like this poem; he is mind blowing and perspective altering. Thank you for your comment, I really appreciate it.
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