his words
steeped in sensuality -
steam warmth against my face
I sip slowly
heat swallows body & soul
& when the cool night wakes,
soft echoes of his voice settle
gently laying
another blanket
over me
Author notes
happy birthday...
of course, this is inspired by your sensual/love poems... you already know how much I love them...lol
A contest entry
- Peteskid is Getting Wiser!!!--birthday tribute by ten thousand cicadas.
2000 points, ended September 4, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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you put p back in poetry,i cant say,but what i want to add,is all people look at it,but only few see it..
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Oh. This is sensuality at it's best my friend. I'm so glad we met through the slush of a washcloth.
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lolol...
toooo funny ..what a wonderful place to meet, eh?
thanks, Kathleen....
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no shit.
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wow
sorry but that's all I can say. again and again and again.
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Beautiful!
... well I will have to do my best, with mine, within the decent limitations. 
Sol
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Amazingly written and composed with such beauty... What else can I say. Thank you for this amazing piece of work.
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Wow.
(I don't say that often, or lightly)
What a beautiful gift for imagery you have. You take such a simple approach and the end result is so much more. The reader is transported immediately- This is a brilliant write and a beautiful poem.
I'd have given you gold.
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thank you so much.
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The last few words are indeed savoring...beautiful Tara
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..gently laying another blanket over me....sigh...
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Your words are always so beautiful,
so touchung, and in many cases so real.
You have an amazing talent, or should
I say a God giving gift. Whatever it
may be, you can writes your butt off !!!
( which is a very good thing ).
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Always attentive, always a poet. Thank you for sharing another beauty from your pen with all of us.
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i like the first stanza...
this drips with senuality. to be covered by deep voices which echo lustfulness. -
Beautifully written. Deep breath sort of poetry that leaves the reader in a haze of rose colored warmth. You have no idea how much I needed a poem just like this today. Thank you. You are a fresh breeze blowing through the window.
Congratulations on the bronze.
Garrison
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oh man... soo lovely.
meg
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This Rocks!
You
this piece, and I thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent once again my friend. Peace, and congrates on the Bronze, awesome write!
Timothy
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Beautiful! This is a poem to savor as well, a wonderful tribute to PK!
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Beautifully written, its title is savouring a poem and this is a poem to savour. Works for me just as well without the comma as it does with it, it stands out as it's the only punctuation but your poetry lingers, leaves a lasting impression, you always write trophy worthy poetry. Kudos.
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A beautifully, romantic poem. This was wonderful.
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one last little nit... a comma or a semi colon ..or a dash.. something after wakes
you need distinction between that line and the next
it was fun watching this transform, and as far as I am concerned in seeing the finished product AND knowing how much work you put into this .. a very well deserved trophy, Tara
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Beautiful metaphor, T. Softly sensuous and so fitting to describe PK's writing and the images and thoughts that really do return to you. Wonderfully done. Thanks for being a part of this celebration, doll.
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' gently laying
another blanket
over me'
So that was a BRILLIANT ending. Sensual simplicity. You truly are a master of your art.
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Oh, wow. I love this! The way you sculpt such imagery with words is astounding. The motions of people are like velvet when you describe them! Well done and good luck!
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A beautiful tribute...it just breathes warmth and love. Enjoyed
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This is absolutely beautiful, and so very well suited for PK. There is warmth, and tenderness written here. What generosity! I wish you well in the challenge dear lady.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Perfect..... such a warmth about this one.
~ Nicolette
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Nice! To have a woman write that way about you is a wonderful thing!
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it's a wonderful image of poetic transubstantiation, to drink of the words of the writer and be changed. -fish
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Reminds me of the difference between being blanket wrapped, and flesh warmed. I don't like 'flesh warmed' but it is as close as I can get.
This is beautiful, Tara.
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Ah yes, his sensual/love poems have that effect, the words linger and images keep on dancing in our mind as if they were dancing the tango.
Simply lovely and so well inspired
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This is a warm and sweet gift which you have wrapped up for your friend.
Good luck in the contest.
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Lovely tribute. Geo
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... perfect...
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aahhhhh. this makes me feel all warm and cozy - on the inside. simply devine. - NANGALEEMA
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This is really good!
I love nights like this, except with me it usually coffee lol.
You are a great writer, you make the reader relate it to their own life.
It brings up memories, its great!
Keep it up!
Good Luck in the Contest.
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Beautiful ...
Blessings
~A~
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Very sensual and romantic. Understated elegance!
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Tara-
There are such gentle words and warm feelings in this gem, moments of our lives, precious things to simply savor...I think this shows how one might savor something...a beautiful poem...Thank you so much...H
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When you post, it feels like something must be said...Kind of like when I post, which is very rarely and most times, at surprising intervals. The way you incorporated the cup imagery and the quietness was different and it reminds me of that poem where that poet eats the apple in the refrigerator...But I can't remember the title or anything, but it's short and has a gentle tone about it like your poem here. There is a coolness to the writing and a soft wanting of imagery...I think you have penned a reflective piece.
No critiques, honestly.
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A lovely spot of love. Always you subdue the mind with your calm and wise words.
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Sounds like a cool guy.
Paul
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Cha-ching...
Scores just like Phelps
I love this of course.
♥Becky♥
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Awww
You're definitely back!
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