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Elven Tears

In midst of mystic forests breath,

thy love lies chained in trampled leaves.

Hark, the ravens sing its death,

o listen how the wind it grieves.

 

Thine evil king of daughter pure;

fear wrathful eyes ablaze in rage,

forbade to see her love no more;

his heart so cursed, ripped from its cage.

 

Thy tears run free, thy spirit soars;

wings of hope in dreams doth fly.

Tis shrill the cry of elven roars,

o true love surely ne`er shall die.

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    In midst of mystic forests breath,

    thy love lies chained in trampled leaves.

    Hark, the ravens sing its death,

    o listen how the wind it grieves.

    Fits the picture so well, and is an altogether terrific write! Keep up the good writing poet!!!!


  • Little Blue Bird
    October 6, 2008
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    Wow

    Awesome write. I love the last verse. Very gripping.


  • Shades of Pale silver member
    September 27, 2008

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    OMG! I didn't like it.... I LOVED IT! i loved this part
    Thine evil king of daughter pure;
    fear wrathful eyes ablaze in rage,
    forbade to see her love no more;
    his heart so cursed, ripped from its cage.




  • nevadapoet
    September 26, 2008
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    another excellent write from you, showing your obvious talent. Great job.
    Big Sis


  • Rachel Kruger
    September 15, 2008

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    Congratulations!

    ... on your gold! Brilliant choice of words - powerful with rhytm & rhyme (inner and end). Wonderful use of imagery. Keep on writing! ... will be back for more.

  • Shadow Lynx
    September 10, 2008
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    I am very proud of it but it is the readers and comments like the one you just posted that make me proud and happy , thank you so much for your input


    • Demmy-Defect
      September 12, 2008
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      anytime ^.^ i adore poems like this!
      and btw, thank you so much for the comment on meh page ^.^

  • Demmy-Defect
    September 10, 2008

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    ^.^ what a breath of fresh air! i love the older style of such vocabulary that you've expressed in this piece... you've great imagery here, as well

    a fantastic write --- you should be proud of it

  • Shadow Lynx
    September 10, 2008
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    Thank you Gypsy And thank you Angel for a brilliant pic and contest and of course the gold, i am very happy you liked it This was a great contest with brilliant entries and i am overwhelmed at getting gold, thank you to all


  • Gypsie Ink
    September 10, 2008
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    Congrats!

    on your shiny Gold!


  • Angelflower
    September 10, 2008

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    This was such a wonderful write!! I love the way you wrote this.. A "dark" picture made beautiful by your words.. You really did such a wonderful job.. I love the emotion in this, thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 8, 2008
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    And thank you for reading And thank you for your comment, much appreciated

  • Gypsie Ink
    September 8, 2008

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    Breathtaking!

    Passionate and powerful. Your words flow ancient and bewitching. I have a love of old language and this deeply sparks my soul. I am honored to have read it. Thank you.


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 5, 2008
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    Thanks for your wonderful comment sis !!


  • eternalsol
    September 5, 2008
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    wow bro thats an alsome poem its beautiful


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 5, 2008
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    Thank you so much LadyDementia That is a beautiful comment


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    Wowzy! This is a stunning take on the picture. You have created some beautiful imagery that unravelled into a wonderful tale as I read. I adore the old English when done well and here it is done to perfection. The flow and rhyme are spot on. Fabtastic read, good luck


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 3, 2008
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    Thank you for your wonderful comments !! I appreciate it very much.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    September 3, 2008

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    Brilliant

    Wonderful take on the picture prompt
    Seems to me to be a winner for sure
    I love the final stanza...
    "Thy tears run free, thy spirit soars;
    wings of hope in dreams doth fly.
    Tis shrill the cry of elven roars,
    o true love surely ne`er shall die."

    Marvelous choice of vocabulary
    Wish you the best in the contest
    Take care
    David


  • HpWICKEDangel
    September 3, 2008

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    wow... i never thought such powerful feeling could exist. you have done an excellent job bring out thy feeling of such mournful existence. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 3, 2008
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    Thank you Sandy, your words so encouraging and uplifting my friend as always


  • Sandygram
    September 3, 2008

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    Stuning Write!!!!!

    This was simply stunning and the imagery is fantastic, For a short poem it says so much! A pleasure to fill the senses with this morning. A winner in my book. Best of luck. You take care.

    Sandy


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 1, 2008
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    i am humbled by such kind words , thank you


  • Elfin
    September 1, 2008

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    Bravo

    Ho Graham this is truly beautiful. I love your choice of words "thy love lies chained in trampled leaves" in fact that whole first stanza is quite something. I find your poem very touching and poignant and a pleasure to read. I only have one critisism my friend, you have left me wanting more. Very, very well done and good luck in the contest.


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 1, 2008
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    Slayer my friend i thank you for your wonderful input, i appreciate it


  • Riamh
    September 1, 2008

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    Now that, was worth reading twice. A terrific take on the pic, Well done! Good luck in the contest.
    Be well,
    Slayer


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 1, 2008
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    Thank you


  • lovinhim
    September 1, 2008
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    WOW

    Wow,so lovely but yet so sad I loved they way you placed it on paper good write


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 1, 2008
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    Thank you glad you liked it


  • Wind 03
    September 1, 2008

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    woooooooow

    this was so amazing...and a profound piece of work!i loved it..i felt my self in the midst of it all! beautiful!but yet sad...it touched me very much
    such excellent work my friend!and good luck on the contest!!

    juliet

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