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Watch Me Burn

 

 


                     Haunted

          I watch the world 

            B  u  R  n  I  n  G

          beneath my

 

                  finger

 

                  t

                    i

                     p

                      s

                       .

                        .

                         .

 

 

 

 

                    and as I watch it

 

              m                a

                  e                     w

                      l                         a

                         t                           y

 

 

 

 

          I notice my

 

          composure

 

          s l 

               i p

                    s .

 

 

 

 

 

          Watching the fire

 

          consume

 

          my life,

 

 

 

 

                  fore

                         v

                           e

                             r

 

          l

         o

         s

         i

         n

         g     my

 

 

 

                   g

                      r  

                   i

                     p...

 

 

 

 

 

 

             It's like I'm

 

 

                    lost

 

          within the mind

             of

                    insanty's

                    abyss...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

It might be hectic,
It mightn't be what you're looking for,
but it was damn fun.

Since you say I can enter a prewrite too, I'll enter another freshwrite.

I am
TheSilverQuill

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Comments


  • Creatress
    September 2, 2008

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    love the format. really adds a lot to the piece. well done poet. Another one in the bag baby.
    creatress


  • thesefadingstars.
    September 2, 2008
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    lol it looks like it was fun great write


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    September 1, 2008

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    ooh this is so different and so cool! hehe this really is great honey. I love it so much, its wonderful
    all my love
    kitty xx


  • Luckintheshadows
    September 1, 2008

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    WOWOW!!! this is great...okay, I'm so loving DP right now, even though I can't write it if my life depended on it...I can so feel the emotion of this, oh and your background just rocks!
    Thanks for sharing and all the best in the contest,

    Luck.