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"Addiction to flying free"

Lost in confusion,
My whole world begins to spin.
I'm frantic, scared, angry to be alive.
All I want is to escape, to be free, feeling the wind on my face and through my hair as I gallope on.
But I'm stuck in one place not moving, not feeling,
over wellmed with the rush of ordinary life.
I begin to cry as I sink to the ground trying to escape.
I'd give anything to be on the back of that big black beauty,
Galloping off into the wilderness of life.
I feel so free and so alive.
Nothing can touch me as my horse and I become one.
The feel of her muscles tens up in anticipation for the ride gets my adrenalin going.
I can barely stand still long enough to saddle her.
I can't take it any longer,
I throw off the saddle, and in one sweeping motion I"m on her back grabbing a handful of mane and telling her its time to fly.
I feel her come alive with excitement as we take off.
As we ride every care, every worry I ever had melts away.
I'm carefree, finally I feel alive.

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  • This Is My Story
    April 20
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    I really like this. The imagery in this is really good. The emotions are also portrayed really well. At the beginning you can really feel the negative emotions but throughout the poem its almost as if they drift away which really suites your story line. Well done!


  • whiterabbit.
    September 19, 2008
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    I like this. You portrayed the emotions here very well. I really like the details and descriptions here. I also really like the imagery in this. There are some spelling errors and typos but you should catch them with a read through. Good job and thanks for entering.

  • She Stole My Voice
    September 16, 2008
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    I like this.
    I love the title too.
    Thank you for entering and good luck.


    -rainbow.

  • Broken-Bones
    September 16, 2008

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    I liked this alot, the negative emotions at the start are really easy to feel but it is nice to also feel them be over come and I loved the postive ending and how you show how somethings things we love can help us over come our pain/sadness. I thought the final line was a wonderful ending as it was so optimistic and it really felt like it finished the piece. I also thought the title was really great, it hints at the content but still allows you to expand and surprise the reader. Thanks for sharing this lovely write x


  • Barefoot poet
    September 9, 2008
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    I know the feeling, it's way too long since I've been riding. You got the frustration across really well in this poem. There's a few teensy spelling errors, gallope = gallop, over wellmed = overwhelmed, tens = tense. Thanks for entering, good luck in the contest!

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