Keep me
from shivering
Take me inside
Under your skin
I choose death
Over losing you
Even to death
So take me along
With you
A contest entry
- Pre-writes, new poems, Anything by Hello...No.One.Home.
525 points, ended September 24, 2008, 104 entries
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You poor woman. If this is anything like based on truth, I wish you better, happier things in the future. No lover would want his girl to die if he did. It would break his heart. He would want to be able to look down, watch over her, and be proud of the difference she is making in the world. In his honour, knowing that they will be reunited when her work is done.
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"I choose death
Over losing you" soo true so true great write
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This is very emotive. I found that it made me feel quite cold and my chest a little heavy.
To choose death over losing someone would make them a very important part of your life.
However, noone is quite worth that.
Beautiful, poignant words.
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Short but really emotional words. Strong emotions you have here.
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Beautiful!
Truth is sometimes hard to put in words. You did well. Keep writing! KC
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Nice, but dark?
A little too dark for me! There is, of course, a meaning down deeper than what this poem says on its literal level! I feel an insecurity here and a lack of self confidence or self love! You do express your emotions so well here, though, so I think you did a good job in such a short poem!
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Under you skin (under your skin)
Over loosing you (over losing you)
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how chivalrious
I have felt the same way
nice flavor
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When you lose a beloved, it's a great tragedy. Great love but I wonder if he'd want to take you in or want you to live.
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This is short and to-the-point. Great job I admire the depth of your love
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