You seek the pleasure of others for a time,
but it's only fleeting...you soon will see.
You have no real reason or no rhyme,
it merely fills the emptiness and void of me.
I am the one to satisfy you completely,
I feed your body, your heart and your soul.
I am what is good and wild and free within you,
I'm what you need to make you whole.
I am the one who will always fill your void,
you will forever seek me for fulfillment and fun.
I chase away your boring, balanced, dull life,
I allow you to take your moment in the sun.
All you have to do is take the risk, say yes,
it's hardly a gamble if you truly find the real.
Your life could be so rich and full of reward,
if you'll just let go and let yourself feel.
Don't fear the one who tenderly holds your heart,
the love I offer is pure and deep and strong.
It is love unconditional without any rules,
how could a love such as this ever be wrong?
I stir the feelings that are deep within you,
you know that is what you fear the most.
While all along you try to run and hide,
I just want to comfort you and hold you close.
Put aside the others, where no joy is found.
Take my hand and love the tried and the true.
For my love for you has no limits or no bounds,
it has patience and will always be there for you.
I long to see sunrises and sunsets in your eyes,
I see the two of us together walking hand in hand.
I shall forever carry thoughts of you with me,
as I continue to wait for you to take a stand.
I will carry on each day with my hopes and dreams,
looking for you to want to make a new start.
I'm praying that my love will find a way,
to penetrate the wall you've built around your heart.
Copyright 2008 Shelly Price
(c) Nevadapoet
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1000 points, ended September 7, 2008, 14 entries
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Comments
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This is a beautiful penning you have written
I love the deep feeling's of love.You have painted a magical picture within my mind
The fourth and last stanza's are my favsTruly it was a delight to have read.Thank you for the entry and best of wishes to you.
Tony
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Thank you so much for your kind and welcome comments. Thanks for the read.
Nevadapoet
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Thought provoking
The man that you love is a very fortunieate indivdual. This poem the love pours forth. I used to feel this way towards a woman who I still love but now that has changed. Beautiful write I look foreward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you for the read...this was about a man I used to love very much...but he never did let me in beyond that wall. Salavie...his loss. Sometimes is better being apart and in love...illusions don't have flaws.
Nevadapoet
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Hello.
I think this is a moving write, which reads like you are saying it to his face, and we are just eavesdropping, with permission of course, ahahha.
I thought your write was done well, a little wordy in places. For example: "I feed your body, your heart and your soul. " I don't think you need 3 "your"'s once you have stated "your body", it is a given that the heart and soul are also his, unless this is a party or something, hahahah.
Rhyme and rhythm done well, and flowed nicely other than; this line; could do with work on "it's hardly a gamble if you truly find the real. " , as I am asking "real what?"
There are some things on a personal level which I do not agree with in this write, but that is neither here nor there, I just like to state it, and our views and beliefs are of course, our own. However there are some good insightful lines as well, for example, knowing what he fears the most. There is also a hint of the writer saying this stuff for herself as well, for what is he without you, thus there is self esteem issues in this, not much, and of course I could be wrong, but I do sense that. Anyway, I wish you well in the contest.
My regards.
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Thank you Mr. Ace for your kind and constructive comments. They always mean so much to me, truly.
Hope to see you on another of my pages soon. I look forward to it.
Nevadapoet
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I'm so glad I got the chance to enjoy this wonderfully created poem. The imagery is so awesome......
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Thank you so much for the read and for the most welcome comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Nevadapoet
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Passionate Piece,
You seem quite the catch here, your words shine brightly, and makes the reader just want to drift in a land where lovers reign, and dreams come true of tenderness, and one feels complete. Thanks for the wonderful write to read, always a pleasure.
Peace and Love.
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
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Oh you say that to all the pretty girls huh? Thank you again for kind words...I am a hopeless romantic, so drifting to where lovers reign is my kind of fun. I appreciate the read, the smile, the flower, most mostely your kind words.
Have a great day.
Nevadapoet
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This is such a deeply loving and penetrating poem of longing. Upon reading, the reader (well me for one) begins to take on the role of the writer and that bears great testimony to the power in these words. Great work! L&P, Kx
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Hey you, thanks for the read and the very welcome comments... I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and felt it was a worthy write.
Nevadapoet
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A wonderfully descriptive poem, of the loneliness that is often felt within relationships.
Very well written, as always. Well done.
Slayer
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Thank you Slayer...I always appreciate your comments...actually look for them these days, they are always welcome from the poetress.
Nevadapoet
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