Vertigo
Unstable mindscape
Falling deeper with
every failing step forward
Spinning; suffocating
Frightening
Author notes
Picture Credit: http://bosniak.deviantart.com/art/Forever-Lost-54681896
A contest entry
- 13 Words Only for this Picture VI by Manda Kathryn.
300 points, ended September 4, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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David,
Very expressive, you have captured the fear and relayed it through your apt word choice. I almost got dizzy just reading this and looking at the picture.
Well Done
Dennis
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holy cow...I have vertigo, I could hardly look at the picture without getting queezy (sp?)...then the words, were nearly enough to pitch me over the edge..pun intended, lol...well done
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I love that picture and I absolutely adore your poem.
Brilliant!!! The use of gerunds getting packed closer and closer together towards the end really helps with the tension in the poem.
Definitely a work of art!
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That is a wonderfully dark interpretation of the picture, it must be terrible to feel out of control like this poem explains. Congratulations on your shiny green. Best to you
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Falling deeper ... what an image to entice the mind with the emotions mixed in of fear.
Amazing take on the picture
♥
Thank You & Best of Luck!
Stay safe
~Manda
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a brilliant take on the promt very deep and etched with powerful thought provoking emotions good luck in the contest
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You used your words beautifully. You really capture the pain and uneasiness. I particularly loved the line "Unstable mindscape", I thought that said an awful lot considering it only used two words. I also loved the phrase "falling deeper with every failing step forward", I thought that the confliction was a wonderful way of showing how moving forward can still feel like falling. Great work x
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