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My Autumn Heart

To breathe in love the silent air
that carries dreams of night's despair;
find grayness where dawn's rosy lips
have kissed the curve of moon's eclipse;
to hold the light in orbs of eyes
that shimmer with wet wells that rise
in songs by lonely life is bled,
the leaf of love in absence shed;
to feel the separation done
by sorrow's hand, fair flower gone;
in absence autumn's offers sad
on mourning meadows crimson clad.

This is the music of the soul: a petal dry
that floats on air: a sob, a cry, an endless sigh ...

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  • Errant Panther gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    strong emotional sentiments expressed here, good rhyme structure and subtle uses of alliteration. very beautiful, makes me feel a sthough I could catch a tear falling amongst the autumn leaves.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 19, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the Gold ...

      it was truly an inspiring contest, do you know? This poem just poured from my soul.

      The tear is true.

      Love to you.
      Myra


  • banrion
    September 8, 2008

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    oh my goodness! You are an amazing poet. I am so much in awe. This poem is marvelous.
    Love
    SarahJane


  • jerome
    September 2, 2008
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    poetry in its finest form!

    Hello Myra

    This is you at your beautiful poetic best !!!

  • Named Mine
    September 2, 2008

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    The imagery itself is the hook, and yet there is a sadness to it.. or one that I see.

    Beautiful.


  • Sandal
    September 2, 2008

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    This is wonderful, a little dance for a falling leaf. The rhythm, sound and images are beautiful. I'm reminded of frost flowers at the edge of a pond. The final couplet is incredibly lovely.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    You're poetry is literally timeless, Myra.
    It would be excellent in any century.
    something profoundly good and satisfying reading it.

  • doodlebug
    September 1, 2008

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    flowing

    morose is the word i was looking for , i think..by sorrows hand, fair flower gone, sounds like the first step towards recovery to me


  • LadyLavender gold member
    September 1, 2008
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    What beautiful poetry here...and what a beautiful soul evolves from this too.

    Love this.


  • leo2
    September 1, 2008

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    I loved it. The rhyme and form give rise to a joy of heart even in the sadness of mind. Perfect poetry in motion. Best wishes in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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