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overheard on the way down

vertigo ventures

to dead-pan spaces

lacked of laughter

 

though bliss exists

rumor relates

 

 

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 2, 2008

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    I like how you italized the last few words, gives a different sense to the poem!
    Great take on the poem


    Thank You & Best of Luck!
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • maralisa silver member
    September 2, 2008
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    a brilliant take on the promt full of great mixed emotions good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    I feel a bit of vertigo looking at that pic .. never was good with heights lol

    Another fab take!

  • Broken-Bones
    September 1, 2008
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    This was a really interesting and clever piece. My favourite line was probably "lacked of laughter", the way that you worded that was marvellous, it really created an image of a place where someone/something had actually taken all the laughter away and that was really powerful. Great work x


  • Cannonsfire
    August 31, 2008

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    Mmm can you have bliss despite a rumor??? lol Maybe C

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