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Disheartened

My fervent hope for love,
all aspirations,
spiraling downward
faster than I imagined.

A contest entry

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  • MelodiousDreaming
    September 2, 2008

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    You convey a great deal of emotion and get your point across quite well with so few words. Best of luck in the contest


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 2, 2008

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    The strength of emotions in just 13 words has left me speechless!

    ♥
    Thank You & Best of Luck!
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • maralisa silver member
    September 2, 2008

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    a brilliant take on the promt full of powerful emotion and I am sure many can relate to your words as we all have despair from time to time good luck in the contest

  • Broken-Bones
    September 1, 2008

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    This is such a powerful piece, the pain and sadness of watching your hopes disappearing is really captured here. I loved the final line, it made it feel very personal and it was very easy to relate it ignited a feeling of despair in me. Great work x


  • BehindTheShadow
    August 31, 2008
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    Nice!

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