Spiraling, falling,
like looking into
your eyes,
the vertigo
of love
with trust
A contest entry
- 13 Words Only for this Picture VI by Manda Kathryn.
300 points, ended September 4, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a good poem that dances across forever's face, ah sweet love, it can make us fall forever at times, right inito the galaxies of emotion that are swirling inside eyes, and we fall, fall, fall, into the depths.
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Thank you! Trying to pack so much into 13 little words and for others to understand is awesome.
Patty
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Vertigo can create so much by itself and you have used it great in this!
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Thank You & Best of Luck!
Stay safe
~Manda
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a great take on the promt good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much for the comment! I tried to have the lines staggered like a staircase, but don't know how. Oh, well, I think it turned out OK.
Patty
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Oh, I liked this take on the picture, the way you used it to convey love was really good. I loved the lines "like looking into your eyes", I felt they gave the reader a clear image to fix on and to attach all the feelings around. Good work x
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Thank you so much! That lovely, light-headed feeling is hard to describe. That staircase came close.
Patty
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