A friend I would like to be
with a giraffe, a bird or even a flea.
Even if we are different in size
and only one of us flies.
Even if we both have skinny legs
and only one can lay an egg.
As you can see we are alike
since neither of us can ride a bike.
Does that mean we are the same
even if we have a different name?
If you will be my friend
I'll be yours until the end.
Darlene Sperber
8/20/08
Though we live across the sea
A friend to Queen Edna I will always be
Even though I wrote this for a class I love the message of being friends no matter the circumstances...Enjoy this Dear Edna and get better soon...Darlene
10/13/08
Author notes
This is my first attempt at writing a poem for a child. It is one of the assignments for the Granny Goose class on 'Writing for Children' here on AP..the class is taught by Catz, my sister of multiple talents..and she doesn't even cut me any slack...but it is a most enjoyable class.
The poem had to be written to the photo prompt and for the age group of my choice....
Credit for this wonderful photograph goes to Sandra Rossouw. You can see more of her photography on Webshots.http://community.webshots.com/user/Sandra0510/profile
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A contest entry
- HUGUENAUTIES CONTEST No. #37 - Cheers for Hugh and Edna by huguenauties.
750 points, ended October 24, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is fun and lighthearted. Enough to bring a smile onto anyones face.
I loved reading it
Georgina.
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Great poetry is for children and adults and for the child in the adult!
Gregg
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What a great photo!
And your poem is such a good one, for children and adults.
Lovely lines and rhymes, the playful way you wrote it made all even more special.
I enjoyed it!
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Lovely Darlene, I believe Giraffe's are Edna's favourite animal. Wonderful childrens story.
Jen
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Thanks Jen, I have been told that giraffes are one of Edna's favorites...sure hope she enjoys the poem.
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Hi Darlene!
Viva la differanze!
Although on the surface we're not all alike...underneath, we're all the same! I enjoyed your poem and pic'..I'm sure Edna loved it, too!
Best Wishes!
<3 Maureen
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Thanks Maureen, I hope Edna enjoys reading my little ditty ...
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Hi Darlene, lovely Children's story to make Edna smile, especially as it's about a Giraffe because it is her favourite animal as Joan says. Good luck in the voting.
Hine
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My sister left today so have a tad more time for a couple of days...then we are leaving for a few weeks but am glad you think Edna will like to poem. Will try to get an original one off to her soon. Darlene
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Dear Darlene, I know for a fact that you've picked Edna's favorite animal, she love Giraffe's, she will be very thrilled. It's a lovely poem for anyone to read. Good luck.
Joan
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Hi Angelica, I do hope Edna enjoys this little ditty I posted for her. My sister will be here for a few more days (yea!) and then we are going to be traveling for a couple of weeks but then my life will return to some sembelance of order...what ever that is...
So by years end I hope to return to writing for contest again...In the meantime give Hugh and Edna hugs from me...
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The photo took me by surprise
I think poems for children can relate the deepest truths - no messing about. Friends make life worth living. This is a sweet message about similarity and difference, and how friends have both.
Best of luck in the voting.
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Thank you Margaret..I don't have time to write a new poem for Edna but this is one of my favorites because of it's beautiful message of being able to be friends no matter what or who or where we are. Isn't it wonderful what the internet has made possible in that respect. . ...
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I'm back again to re read this delightful poem and see the cute picture with it
good luck in the contest. I think Edna will get a kick out of it, too
And the system probably wont let me applaud it again... so here's some anyway
Dee
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This is soooo cute! Very well written and a good job.
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A lesson for all ages,
differences can welcomed,
invited to participate,
and soon, no real diferences at all.
A charming piece!
M-C
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I really enjoyed this children's poem.I enjoy writing for children, myself.
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Thank you Virginia, I am taking a class and this is one of the assignments. It is very fun to do. Thanks for reading and commenting on it.
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Absolutely gorgeous, I can see myself reading this to my nieces and nephews
Lovely to read!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Thank you Manda. I hope your nieces and nephews enjoy it.
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cute. I like this. I think children will enjoy reading this. On first read was confused by "only one of us flies" maybe try "only one of us can fly" Just my opinion. The rest of the poem is great. Love the picture.
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I agree with your comment on the change and will do it momentarily...Thanks, A63...Darlene
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very cute . . perfect for a children's poem . . liked "A friend I would like to be" and "As you can see we are not alike" . . well done . . nice picture also
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Thank you Carole21
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I love your first attempt at writing a poem for a child.
How I wish, I could too.
I like simple rhymed poetry for children to read.
Great write!
Summer51
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Thank you sunshine girl. I am taking a class...why don't you join in. It doesn't cost you anything and you can learn how to write for children. Chekc it out on the class page...it is a lot of fun
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What a fun read this one is! This would have been perfect when I was putting together the scrapbooks of poetry for my grandchildren, but I may do another one for my God Children, if so would you allow me to use this one. I would of course credit you with the work.
Great job, and wonderful message in this one!
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Of course you can put this in your scrap book...I will be honered if you do...be sure to give credit for the photgraph...
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Interesting; I will admit that this isn't my style - whilst I see where you're coming from on it, there were a couple of parts that didnt make sense for me, for example;
"As you can see we are not alike
since neither of us can ride a bike."
If neither can ride a bike, then they [are] alike in that aspect, but perhaps if you changed it to something like,
"As you can see we are not alike
Yet neither of us can ride a bike"
Suggesting that to the lone eye they are not alike at all, yet they have similarities about their abilities and what not if you get where I'm coming from.
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Thank you for the critque. I suppose my thought is that because they are not alike they are the same...sort of 2 negetives make a positive thing...I suppose that only makes sense to me..
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LOL, ok, I see where you're coming from although I think I would only agree with you if i was not sober; then all that doesn't make sense to me now magically comes together to add up
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I see you finally were able to get the artist's permission to use her picture... that's great, it really brings the story into prospective, is entertaining, too. Anyone would get a giggle and an 'ahhh' from this
Love and
Dee
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Thanks...enjoying this class very much...
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I've thought about trying that class too. I just never seem to find the courage. I have a feeling Catz would hang me when I turned in my first assignment, "A Shocking Kids Tale Of Horror!"
It has a message here of course...appreciating differences and how despite them we can still be friends.
Giraffes are cool, even if I did once burn some in a story I once wrote.
So sis is an evil taskmaster? And she seemed so nice.
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Ahhh... come on, Yem. I double dare ya. I'd love to have you and your shocking tales of horror in my Granny Goose class.
And don't believe J aime coudre... you know how sisters are when it comes to such matters. -
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I might shock you some day by actually joining the class. Do graduates still get those cool blue trophies?
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Yep, graduates still get those cool blue trophies
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Sure the get a cool blue trophy Yem, ...check out the one I got from the haiku class...now am working on getting another one for the advanced class..
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Hi Yem,
thanks for commenting...isn't that a precious photo...I think you should go ahead and write her a story for the class...shocking tale of horror seems like a great kiddie story to me...
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I'm glad you posted this, Sis. It's such an adorable poem and picture. Too bad Webshots doesn't allow downloads of their pictures anymore. Maybe you could email the photographer and see if she'd allow you to use it. Give her a link to the poem so she can see why the picture and poem go so well together. I hope everyone takes the time to go to the picture link.
And I don't need to cut you any slack in the class... you do very well without it
love and
Dee
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