A happy song for a change
listen closely as it rings
a delightful melody from afar
come closer, and listen
it is ours
laughter sings out for all to hear
you remind me of many things
past and present, but all the same
this strange sensation
the feeling you have brought to me
no more sadness no more pain
you filled me with amazement
I am going crazy
dorky and 10 feet off the ground
you know what?
I think I like flying =)
If you bring me down I swear
I'd... tickle you to death
that is if you were ticklish
not fair -.-
anyways here's what I'm saying
they are probably coming
right now to take me away
for I am insane
and walking on air!
Author notes
OK so I was crazy happy. so I wrote a silly little thing. not my fault I swear. wow...
A contest entry
- Tick me off. or please me your choice. by Black Wolf.
1150 points, ended March 28, 32 entries
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Comments
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Good Luck!
Cute write! I love how it captures the essence of simple young romance. Thanks for the smile and thanks for entering.
~Tabitha -
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest with this smile bringer of a write, bubbly love and laughter shinning through the words
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its cute
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relatable and well written
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nice! i could relate..^_^
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It has a great flow and it made me smile. I enjoyed reading it. The 5th stanza was my favorite.
~Ashley~ -
Like it...
This poem gave me, my morning smile. I enjoy reading happy poems to start my day.
4th stanza my favorite lines.
"Have a nice day! "
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My favorite part is...
laugher sings out for all to hear
you remind me of many things
past and present, but all the same
this strange sensation
the feeling you have brought to me
This is a wonderfully light poem. It brightens the heart and makes you think of that wonderful time when you are silly with new love. Thanks for sharing!
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thank you for reminding me what it feels like to fall in love. Really enjoyed reading this.
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actually...it's adorable...and it has a bubbly little flow to it...
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Awwww, this is cute and funny! I'd take that "(a dorky love)" off of the title and let the laughter of the poem show through. Also, in the third stanza you have the word amazing.....amazing what?
Maybe 'amazement' would work better. 
An enjoyable read.
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