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untangled from the centre out

 

 

 

 

 

Samurai-sue traipsed through Columbian jungles, looking for a sin or a sign - which, once no longer lost, equated the same. She wore a hard-hat against the glare of Apollo, a hybrid style: half deconstruction worker and half safari hunter hat, a helmet against the curious sunlight of passers by.
 
She was never looking to be saved or even to save herself. This story holds no measure of victim or vagabond. Not even the pirate-kind, such as that portrayed by Johnny Depp, her fantasy idol.
 
No. This was simply an art of fearless. No less. No more. A quest to ignore, despite archaeological interest, each ruin she passed, each structure abandoned by time to her past. Some claimed, mistaken, that she sought a path out. Not so. She marched headlong and body short, deeper and deeper. Pushed past primordial ferns and creatures bizarre, for no reason less than finding the heart.
 
Only then could she find hers and be able to move on a risk, on a chance that there were hands to match. Strong enough to hold and quiet enough to let go: as calloused as the heart of a someone caught in her eye. A someone who lived in the north, far enough so to balance her south. Distant enough for her to catch a breath.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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For a friend among friends, who may just have found the place she belongs. She inspires me to try to search for mine.

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  • iverbthenoun
    September 17, 2008

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    i also guessed who "she" was... you have given the reader a chance to be "her" too... i love how you wrote this. so simple and wonderful. good luck and thanks so much

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 9, 2008
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    this is good medicine.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    I knew I knew when I read this the first time
    who this was for but I waited
    because it's what I do

    "No. This was simply an art
    of fearless. No less. No more. A quest
    to ignore, despite archaeological interest,"

    poetry

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 4, 2008

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    You know me, perhaps, better than I know myself. This is scary. Did I mention calloused hands at some point? I don't remember mentioning that

    how did you know?

    lol

    I keep coming back
    gonna print this out and keep it in my traveling journal
    a reminder that there are others out there who pay attention just as closely as i do.

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 3, 2008
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    You do not miss a thing, Kate.
    You've been reading closely.

    Another

    this is cry-inspiringly beautiful.

    (like that? a new word)

    i stop commenting now

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 3, 2008
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    I needed this.

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 3, 2008
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    oh...

    this got buried

    how do you do silly and beautiful at the same time...

    you are beautiful



    straight into bookmarks


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    I like this alot!!! as she inspires many of us.. there are a lot of places in this, to sit awhile and ponder upon life and what it all means
    great prose Katie..
    Gilly.xx

  • Rowan gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    Everyone should have a friend that inspires, and encourages always.
    I loved the end.
    'passers by' should that be one word?


  • Randomly Beautiful
    September 1, 2008

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    Kate this is exquisite prose. I think it is simply beautiful. Too many good parts to mention only a few.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    August 31, 2008
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    Wow! She sounds like the Indiana Jones of my dreams!-on


  • Cannonsfire
    August 31, 2008

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    I loved this piece of prose, you capture a character in this and we warm to her as you obviously have.It is nice when prose draws you into a person and you can relate. C


  • apples fell
    August 31, 2008

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    This glows with truth.
    I don't critique most prose...I am incapable of doing so, not writing it much myself. But know that I have read this and enjoyed the expression and the way it ran through me like sunlight above water.

    ;

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