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Haiku for Peace






White smoke rising
Screams no more
In twisting silence













Author notes

Thanks to Amera's Haiku teachings here on AP, I discovered that the 5,7,5 pattern ain't necessarily so!

http://allpoetry.com/list/35411-Haiku

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  • Draig aine gold member
    May 21, 2009

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    a most excellent senyru

    the image created is very strong and the words beatifully crafted a good job, thank you for entering my contest , best of luck


  • Patpowers silver member
    November 2, 2008

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    I give you my thumb's up ( and big toe up ) on this! GREAT MESSAGE MY FRIEND!!


  • nevadapoet
    October 6, 2008
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    BRAVO...very strong


  • marc creamore
    October 4, 2008
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    Chilling . . . Basho would be proud!

    Marc


  • Auburn Sunrise silver member
    September 1, 2008

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    Chilling.... it's amazing how much impact you created with so few words. I am still reeling from the sick feeling it gave me in the pit of my stomach. Reminded me of haunting scenes such as Auschwitz, Rwanda, and the Japanese occupation of China during WWII - among others.

    Harrowing writing. I just still can't figure out how you do this with so few words.

  • Judith Chandler
    August 31, 2008

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    The "twisting silence" is very original and the haiku as a whole has an eirie affect that I really like.

    Thank you for your submission.

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