Image Credit: Frozentearz
Discovery's stairs
lend footing and residual climb.
Pretense perfects the last
measure of playtime
when sunrise finds her breath of freedom
and sunset closes her childhood days,
drifting aimlessly
beneath lapping water,
lily pads
and quiet memories.
A contest entry
- ~ Steps~ Picture prompt by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended September 11, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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excellent~
You bought this pic to life with your words
I looked and could think of nothing for a bit
Your words took me on a wonderful journery
Congrats on the gold trophy
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Susan
Thank you so much for your kind words. I am pleased you
enjoyed this poem. ~Pamela
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very clever
I am glad you won it was written well you used a different style of poetry, i entered too but my poem was to short and choppy not as good as yours .YOU COULD READ MINE
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Violinstrings
Thank you for taking a moment to read and to leave your impressions. I appreciate your words very much and have taken a look at your poem. Thank you for asking. I am glad to have read your lovely verse.
I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks again. ~Pamela
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Congrats for the Gold, Pam
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Thank you my friend.
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Congratulations poet.
Pamela, you are the master poet.
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Ron
Thank you. ~Pamela
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What a lovely take on the picture. Your gracefully written words are as serene as the photo. Beautiful work. Always a pleasure to read you poet! Best wishes in the contest.
Sam
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Sam
Thank you so much for your kind words on this piece. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Beautiful piece of set free verse. With your poems, dear poet, part of the artistry is the lineation and spacing upon the blank page.
References to sunrise and sunset can be so predictable but yours speaks wonderfully to the title!
"when sunrise finds her breath of freedom
and sunset closes her childhood days."
The alliteration of "lapping" with "lily pads" is so effective because it is unobtrusive yet ties the two together so aptly.
Best wishes.
Lyndon.
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Ron
Thank you for such a wonderful review. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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WHat a wonderful picture you have painted from this gorgeous pic! Alive with imagery and nostalgia. Thanks for entering and best wishes,
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Frogz~
Thank you so much for your kind words and the honor of gold in your contest. I am truly humbled. Thank you. ~Pamela
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You've painted the picture with your words. The tranquility here is abounding. You've drawn wonderful images from the photo. Brilliant! I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
renee
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renee
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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I like the way you have written this. It doesn't make "sense" as such, but it totally gives "feeling".
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Vozhd
Thank you for your comment and attention. I appreciate your words so much. ~Pamela
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It's as if all the secrets of the universe are held in the mysteries of childhood and such beautiful places as this "pond". Another poem too, Pamela, of enigmatic beauty that has it's own current beneath the surface. ~ Karen
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Karen
Thank you. There are places in our worlds that hold another world of joy and peace. I am pleased you found this in here. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Wonderful
I think it’s written beautifully, it reminds me of when I was younger and didn’t have to deal with such hard situations that come with growing up. When I wasn’t a teenager, life was so much similar, and it’s amazing how you can reach back then and bring it into the now.
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SuidicalTeen
Thank you so much for taking a moment to read and leave your impressions. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Great :)
This is capable of taking one to a world which is so familiar...I guess that's the way one connects with people through poetry. Your memories make a mark, truly...and it makes us think of what is left in us of that child that we all used to be. Excellent work. Congrats!
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ashjoe76
Thank you so much my poetic friend. Your words mean the world. ~Pamela
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mmm I love the ending to this.
" drifting aimless
beneath lapping water,
lily pads
and quiet memories."
I thought so many thoughts as I took in what was before me.
Love what you have taken from the picture.
Thanks so much for joining in,
Warm thoughts.
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Frozentearz
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the honor of gold in your contest. I am so pleased this hit the right spot with you. I am honored. ~Pamela
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