Oh God
you are an ancient weaver
day and night
zipping the skin of the subsisting ones
you must have the footsore by now
also envisioning to acquire
a support
if you are truly
inquisitive to have the helper
I am the candidate
Oh God...
A contest entry
- PIF/Picture Inspired by AliceinPoetryLand.
1000 points, ended September 1, 2008, 10 entries
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The picture combined with your words, make me feel like God the master weaver you are volunteering to help, and it is a servants heart that you show here...Beautiful words and thoughts...
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Thank you for sharing this psalm with us. It is simple,touching, delicate and urgent at the same time.
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The beauty of the simple wood, metal and mechanics shown here in the prompt; how it all serves so faithfully in a real earthy and honest way. Just as the soul which sees and writes, also using it as such a fitting symbol and reminder of 'good works' of greater and wider nature.
I admired this when I first read it and was then uncertain what to say...
The most immediate quality which came across to me was and is humility, a wonderful humility which gives comfort as a necessity if one is to face the true Greatness of the Real, with a loving intention to serve.
I love the simplicity and closeness of this discourse which is both accompanied by grandeur and yet so light and intimate in its immediacy of address...
'you must have the footsore by now
also envisioning to acquire
a support'
... such a smile it brings, that it can be like this.
A wonderful expression in poetry my friend and so fitting to the prompt.
Sol
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Nice paryer.
Hello prabhudayal...very fine prayer indeed.
Rahbar.
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I love this...simple and elegant words of devotion to His way and will. Willngness to be His man, so to speak. Oh, Prabhu...this is beautiful...really. Peace always, Rhonda
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I liked this piece well written thanks for sharing it
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Wow!! such a way to discribe this picture, a unique idea. Indeed God is the ancient weaver of the world.
As expected from you, a unique poem!
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Imaginative and very spiritual take on the prompt, its good to see so many different takes , best of luck
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that's a unique take on the picture prompt and a very bold statement of the poet's faith in the one who designs the patterns of the world. congrats and best regards.
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This is amazing what a beautiful capture to this picture.
God yes our loving father be he so the one who created this world.
Each one , each thing, each amazing mircle different.
your words have done beautiful justice to this.
Good luck my friend.
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Excellent! A most beautiful take on this picture. He is the ultimate weaver of creation, is he not?
Thank you for this fine entry
gaylene
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