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Silver kiss

I'm dreaming of you for such a long time
but you don't look me
why would you
I'm just a child in your eyes
I'm not smart as you are
I'm way out of your class

Friends told me not to
But I fall in love
I fell for that brown eyes
and that cherry lips

I know that you can't love me
I'm not asking that
all I want from you is
just a kiss
not kiss from a rose
not kiss sweet as chocolate
but silver kiss

I want kiss silver like a winter snow
after all I'm a winter child
Who loves you
And want to be kissed

Please give me that one kiss
That silver kiss



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  • strangerforeigner
    September 5, 2008

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    I love the concepts you give here, but your grammar needs a little work, and I wish you would introduce the concept of the silver kiss a little sooner in the poem, and give a little more about it. Also, I'm curious, why are you out of his class? Thanks for entering and good luck!