The weather vane changed direction
just as another drop of coffee fell
into the masses.
I almost imagined the Laughing Buddha
come to life and walk away;
[no more lights in the room]
A moth escapes
through the broken glass
in search of a brighter bulb.
Silence cries:
the vacant space feels so
empty
Author notes
This moment was inspired by the leaving of Maestro Azuma in the anime "La Corda D'Oro". I felt the intensified moment that they showed, and penned down my version of the feeling.
A contest entry
- personal poetry. ❤ by aanika.
1147 points, ended September 13, 2008, 40 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critiques welcome!
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Huh....this is really good imagrey. Now that I've read it without any people calling my name. Work sometimes asks me to do stuff.
Great piece. Different.
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i'm glad this kept your interest.
i appreciate your views. thanks loads!
bless ya!
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I loved the imagery.
Well-written.
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thank you! i'm glad you enjoyed it!
bless ya!
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aww i loved this!!! it has so much depth...i wish i could see and observe things the way you are able to.
keep it up
your true fan^_^
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aww, lol, thanks.
i'm glad the feeling got through.
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A moth escapes
through the broken glass
in search of a brighter bulb.
Silence cries:
the vacant space feels so
empty
wow. kickass ending! [I apologize for my language but that's how I feel.]
this was awesome. thanks for entering. (: -
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wow, thanks loads for the silver!! i'm much honoured!
bless ya!
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thank you! i'm glad you enjoyed this piece. your views are much appreciated.
bless ya!
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