Burst of confetti in the air
Shining brightly on angel’s hair
Flowing, tossing…my spirit’s high
Colors of love letting me fly
Like feathers boating of their flare –
Burst of confetti in the air;
Pieces of me riding on clouds
I am rising above the crowds
No rain could ever let me down
No man could ever make me frown;
Burst of confetti in the air
I will fulfill all the life’s dare
For my spirit is in a trance
Below vibrant pieces of chance
There’s nothing to do but to stare –
Burst of confetti in the air
Author notes
A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains. It is similar to the Kyrielle
and the Retourne. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain. The first line of
stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza
four. A quatern has eight syllables per line. It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme. (ShadowPoetry.com)
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Quatern - Prompt - Spirit by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended September 14, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Insightful comments are truly appreciated
Comments
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Hmm makes me think you yourself is the muse..and wow form...
I like how you used clouds as your methapor in a very postive way...
I love the image of burst of confetti -
Thank you for your entry
You took this is more a mood direction. Spirit as in emotion, which is nice. I like to see the different interpretations. Nice imagery and use of poetic device in this one.
The form was done well and your refrain line carried well through out the poem. A nice punch for each stanza as the word 'Burst' explodes off the page when I read it. You followed the syllable count right on point. I appreciate your use of rhyme, as I feel it lends well to the flow and rhythm.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Your refrain line is happy and positive and lends a wonderful note to each stanza. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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You take the quaturn form and make it a pure delight to read with even flow and wonderful meter. The imagery in the repeating line is perfect making the poem "burst" with energy. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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