None are immune from its far reaching grip
the plain truth is, every one will fall.
Strong strangling hold impervious,
pleading and prayer wont help
The richest man it's lackey
striking one and all.
Who is this foe
that we cant
triumph?
Time
ticking,
the sands fall
marking moments,
single frame captured
the film of all our lives.
Marking momentous events
and also the destructive ones.
Every souls focus being different,
we are all co-stars in others movies.
Author notes
"evil angels are the best kind"
Griswold
Etheree
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables.
Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
Get creative and write an Etheree with more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.
Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
...Triple Etheree, Quadruple Etheree, and so on!
Ok, the Cinquain has a descending/ascending syllable count and are merged into the Butterfly form by dropping one single syllable word and making one poem out of it.
I figure why not the Etheree? So I did it. I'm sure somebody else has done the same before. 
I'm a rebel.
In a list
A contest entry
- Ever Etheree by azure85.
600 points, ended September 14, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm a Citizen of The Planet by Edited.
1000 points, ended October 3, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Forms/Dirty Pretty by the evil angel.
400 points, ended May 10, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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fab
a fabulous write. well done. i loved read this. I love how "time ticking" is central to the form... very appropriate. A good message and interesting idea. like the themes and use of adjectives. i like how the words flow very well together. not forced at all. a strong contest entry. i hope you win with this one.
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This is so cool it looks like an hourglass! That's awesome! I'm deciding not to look into this form because syllable counting is an enemy of mine. I always spend too much time working on the syllables and not enough on the words. BUT you can clearly work with this form very well and I commend you on that because I never could. The imagery, the emotion, all leave me pining for more. Well done.
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Thank you for following the rules. Will comment on the actual poem later.
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Thnks
Thanks for your entry it was a pleasur to read it. good form. -
You lead the reader to "time"
There is deep thought here.I now love Etheree.Cinquains are beautiful.The syllable scheme is awesome. -
Three cheers
Talk later.
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I liked the the way you presented the poem. What you are saying is an interstimg observance of lie. I liked thed the last lines - 'Every souls focus being different, we are all co-stars in others movies'.
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Very creative use of the etheree, and why not! It is excellent, and the hourglass shape is very cool. A story of life on the screen we all live, thank you so much.
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Nice piece!
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wonderfully penned here.
best of luck in the contest
love you
passions
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