The Perfect Strangers
So Sedusive With Charm
Soon These Two Strangers
Are Walking Arm And Arm
Exploring A New Land
Smelling A New Scent
Flirty Smiles And Lots Of Tease
The Rules Soon Get Bent
Time Starts Moving Quickly
Pressing Every Boundary They Find
The Rules Of Reality Stuck In Fast Forward
Leaving All Commen Sense Behind
Soon It's Time To Part
She Unraveles From His Hold
He Presses His Lips Upon Hers
It Fits Like A Perfect Mould
As She Turns Away
And Whispers Her Goodnight
She Disappears Forever More
Because She Knows This Wasn't Right.
Author notes
Well..This One Is Interesting. I Rarely, Actually Never Do This. I'm Not The Type To Jump Head First Into A Relationship. But For Some Reason I Sort Of Did. I Met Someone Through A Friend. He's A Year Younger Than Me. So The Poem Says How The Night Occured Now Im Left With The After Math. This Guy Has A Rep For Being Somewhat Of A Ladies Man,, In A Bad Way. Now Im One Of Those Girls. And I'd Much Love To Return To Before.. When I Would Think Before I Did.
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WHY DO YOU CAPITALIZE FUCKING EVERYTHING?!?!!!!!!!
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Haha, she types in complete capitals and critisizes you Shellibee. The capitals have nothing to do with the actual poem suechtig, and I don't think you should be so mean. Capitalizing everything or not capitalizing anything, it doesn't make the poem worse just because she uses capitals. Don't be so mean next time. She asked for constructive critisism.
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This is so...good!! I love the concept and the wording is delightful! You might wanna spellcheck this, though. I found quite a few spelling errors.
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very well written, and i think you captured the moment very well. The last line is very strong and clinching, with a real sense of finality and regret.
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