Running rapidliy..emotions go
interlocking with
nature's flow..
furiously it's ire wells up
'neath the calm
rivers edge cupped..
into a cervice securely
locked into promised longevity's
existence, while basking in
the pool of what might have been..
A contest entry
- Quickie ~ come join in ~ 10 poets Prompt given when by blondone.
600 points, ended September 1, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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SHORT, simple... and yet so deep and verbose... perfect choice of words... this was great to read! and congrats on the silver!
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thanks!
I am glad you liked this one my friend, and thanks for the kind words.
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OH!
Wow...I loved this one, Swan....I loved the steppiness you had going on here.
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Thank you
I appreciate your wonderful comments and your continued support so much my friend!
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The emotions in this write are deep so very deep I must say the imagery is outstanding along with a lovely flow making this a enjoyable read right from the start, but its that last line that sums it all up Grand writing skills shown here thank you for entering and sorry it has taken me so long to judge but my internet is giving me a headache.
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deep piece here bro. I love the flow as usual. nice quickie. Good luck in the contest bro.
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Beautiful sir, and longevity is what it's all about
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AAWW..
Why thank you Miss, I agree wholeheartedly!
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Very well done for the prompt. Best of luck to you in the contest...Scott
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Thank you!
I really appreciate that you took time out to read and comment on my work, and wished me luck too! wow, very kind of you sir!
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Love it great last line!
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Thank you
hey there! fancy see you round these parts! l.o.l. thank you so much for your comment and support..
it's appreciated so much!
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This here was deep my dear and a beautiful one at that.
I enjoyed this.
Thanks for leaving me in awe.
good luck to you in the contest
love
Passions
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Thanks!
I left you in awe? wow! that's a compliment thank you dear one!
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Beautifully penned and deep take on the prompt. Loved the flow and imagery. Also, you have penned with wonderful alliteration. A most enjoyable read. Best wishers in the comp
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Wow
Impressed, that I got a comment, even more so that it was a positive one. thank you so much.
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