Alchohol & cocaine
Still I'm moody?
Perhaps I should rent a video
& pop a qualudie?
No one understands me
I don't know who I am anymore
I'm so depressed & some times
over elated I'll implore,
(In the middle of sex)
I might ask you "Who the hell you are?",
Then bite your fucking nose off,
and tell you that I love you.
Should I get up today?
Should I play a new song?
Like a window display
I'm made of wood, and in a thong
Christ, I'm so confused
In denial from the abuse
So cryptic & obtuse
BIG like the Spruce goose
And as Bi-polar as Howard Hughes,
left handing a crack pipe,
and dancing in the rain.
Dressed to the nines.
I've decorated more
seconds than you've
ignored, to hippy hippy shake.
Go tell a legless child
in Afghanistan
how you suffer flower
child being chemically
unbalanced & when they
nod off bored off their
fucking scabbed stubs.
Check their pulse,
not mine.
I am Bi-polar, so quit fucking staring at me.
Try to understand my plee, I am a special case.
A good person, a muse, a broken fucking
Buddy Holly record.
Author notes
#3
Written January 18th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Mental Illness by master-of-shadow.
325 points, ended August 2, 2006, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I agree with the person who first comemnted. has a good start.
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Well written. You are missing a full stop in the title and you didn't follow the rules again. SHame.
skitza
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Whow, even this poem is up and down! You did a great job illustrating this. Oh, and a side note: The Aviator was a great movie. I think Howard Hughs lived one hell of a life, and his mental illness was a big part of his brilliance.
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You don't know who buddy holly and howard hughes are?
Now that? that's sad. Do you know who your parents are? -
I think I'm too young to get a lot of the jokes. I have no idea who Buddy Holly or Howard Hughes is, but hey it happens. Thanks for entering my contest!
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Say 3 Hail Mary’s and dip your whole head in the dish of holy water and you should be straight.
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wow thats deep i understand but not comepletely no one can
tweak~ -
interesting...indeed.
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Interesting. Very interesting. Nice work, and thanks for entering.
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This is how I feel today.... -
thank you.
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You started well and hooked me in, but then the whole damn thing deteriorated before my eyes until it became nothing more than another broken (Buddy Holly) record.
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No carla, thank you, and stop staring at me.
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Great poem, fantastic imagery and a fascinating subject. Very well done. But the least you could do is respect the one thing I asked you to do and write it properly. You mightn't believe it and that's fair enough but that quote means something to me, and I don't like seeing it made fun of. Thanks
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What lies around us is what lies within us blah blah blah blah.
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While i like rants, i think this is a tad too vulgar for my tastes....but at least you labelled it as such. I suppose that if one likes this sort of thing, they could consider it to be good, but i'm afraid it's not for me. XXX
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i remember reading the title thinking, shit, he's wrote me poem. i'm on a friday night revisit of some of my favorites.
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great
i so totally know what yea mean!! i never stay in onr place emotionally. I love the flow of this poem, kinda like some jumpy addict in need of a fix, lol -
hee hee, creative brilliance. xxxxxxxxx
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This is a great write, you got your point across in a way that makes sense to you. i love it, it was fun to read and also gives you a little insight into what you're feeling. but oh man i really hope you were kidding about biting someones nose off. ow.:-)
allie -
Rewind!! LoL, i love tangent rants like this, it makes me feel like im sitting right next to you, and you go off...and i sit there staring in astonishment! With a bemeused WTF look on my face...
i liked it...
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I like this. It has a very "I know exactly what's going on" and I know just where everything goes" kind of quality to it... trying to throw us off-balance with imagery that tries to shove you over the edge of the precipice, but it didn't happen.
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what makes me think that you are more together than a lot of people....big fat kiss round the chops and a big huggy squeeze for yet another masterpiece.
Edited on Jan 18, 10:13 because 'schpelling'. -
I'm back, ya know, I don't know if that title interests you at all, but I was thinking, you are such a better writer and all I ever really wanted (and can be documented in my Senior Class write-up) was to be "a long liner note on an album that lives forever" maybe you could write the whole book? And, like just throw me a bone. Shucks, I'm embarassed I even asked....Sorry.
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Been working, (well not really, working all I have is the title just having a title makes me think I might one day write it), bookshortstorysomething called "There Are Punks In The Pews and other Holy Places" This would make a lovely, foreward. Rave on.
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F-ing great
FUCKING Great, what more else can i say ?
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