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She's packing for her destiny
with starlights in her eyes.
I know I have to let her go,
so I smile past these tears
that rise.

She has places she must go
and she's ready to begin.
I hope I can still be waiting
here when that girl's
adventure ends.

Although she knows it breaks
my heart, this is something
she must do. So I tell my girl,
"Goodbye, baby I love you."

One day I hope she comes back
home, so I can kiss her face.
Maybe then two seperate futures
can find their way back to
just one place.

Can you feel my pulse?

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  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    this one rhymed! wow is there anything that you cant write??? Its almost sad. the pairing of two that were one. based upon the decision of just one.

    the poem, My demise, evolved from personal experience therfore i know what you feel somewhat. They do say third times charm so i'll cross fingers and toes for you. not suprisngly you read into that piece what others totally missed.













  • felicitisdancer
    September 24, 2008

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    excellent

    i have this thing for worthless points and so do not read this comment, it is really a stupid compulsive thing to try to get more than four, right now i am struggling with my good sense that says..debbie you really need to get a ficking grip...and STOP typing.ok i will


  • Crash Into Me
    September 22, 2008

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    i havent commented your stuf in a looooong while. too long it seems.

    this is heart warming.
    :]

    ♥ ♥
    [[alexsis]]


  • c e ll a r . d oo r
    September 18, 2008

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    Wow. I loved seeing your vulnerable side. This poem packed such emotion in one small punch.

    The first two lines are brilliant & pulled me in, mezmerized.

    Very deep, very emotional.

    Amazing write.

    Now, I think it just went from lust to love. Lol.

    ♥


  • Blackie
    September 17, 2008

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    Wow. I can understand how this would feel. My boyfriend is leaving for the Navy, and I'm torn up. I'm trying to accept the fact that it's something he wants to do, and needs to do, but it doesn't change the fact that I'll be devestated when he leaves.


  • Sarah957
    September 7, 2008

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    You've captured some very nice thoughts here. Its sweet to think someone would wish you so well when you spread your wings and fly away.

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