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ex-girlfriend syndrome

seriously drowning rather than suffocating.

blindly walking in every wrong direction imaginable
hung up on every syllable that flows between the

softness of his lips, only to come to the realization

that its only a pipe dream.

 

pure fiction

 

 

gasping for air, begging to release every ounce of

energy with just one puff. heads turn as i stumble

through the crowd. i'm searching for the sound of

your heartbeat but it's faint. not even your shallow

breaths can be heard between the gaps of silence

left behind

 

 

tracing the ground for your footsteps to see where

you've gone seems like the only thing keeping me

going. all the places you've been seem as heartless

as you're becoming. you're slowly shedding pieces

of me with every step you take.

 

is it that easy to forget me?

 

 

Author notes

i wrote this during my u.s history class before lunch...its just one of those things i do i suppose. i'm slowly but surely trying to get my brain back on track.
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About said poem: lately i've been in a funk. and i come out of it everyonce in a while. but while i'm in it i always drift back to the days where i was with my bestfriend. those have always been hard to tell if the feelings have gone away or not but i can never tell. i really miss him being my best friend AND my boyfriend instead of just my best friend...but you can't change peoples minds i suppose

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partial venting...i'm always venting...it makes me feel slightly better i suppose

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  • RomeoPierson
    September 19, 2008
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    I must say that this is quite bomb


  • etoile
    September 7, 2008

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    wow i loved this.
    the emotions were abundant and amazing.
    this was very well written.

    gasping for air, begging to release every ounce of
    energy with just one puff. heads turn as i stumble
    through the crowd. i'm searching for the sound of
    your heartbeat but it's faint. not even your shallow
    breaths can be heard between the gaps of silence
    left behind
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    i loved that stanza! the imagery was fantastic.

    i also liked the line 'pure fiction' that really hit hard for me.

    thanks for entering and best of luck


  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    September 1, 2008

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    ive been trying to put these exact feelings into words for a while now.
    thanks for doing it for me.
    this was perfect.
    peace.


  • SincerelyMegan
    August 31, 2008

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    I think for any incomplete breakup this poem would definitely explain their situation.

    This is written so nicely and I can feel all the confusion and emotions coming out of it.

    Great write and good luck.


  • trekkergirl
    August 31, 2008

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    This is very good. I like the ending when he questions is this really so easy to forget me. Great write. I like it alot


  • foreverxnow
    August 30, 2008

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    wow. this is a poem fit for every unsatisfying breakup, even for those friends who aren't close anymore. your words bring a vivid image to life in my mind. nice write & i hope this gets better for you.

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