comets are just flashy lights
no longer leading the way
back into hope.
the feelings slide through me
as if I'm a ghost
invisible to anyone, but myself.
jumping in front of traintracks
just to feel the adrenaline
which never appears
just like the rest of my emotions
that have gone missing
ever since you left.
it's been a traumatic incident
for the both of us
but I've been left an empty shell
while you're just full of surprises
and shades of black and white.
I no longer feel the bloodrush
in my veins or my heart
after you left me spineless
at the bottom of the pool
I no longer felt any part of my body.
it's been beating after beating
and my head is spinning faster
than your eyes on a day
when I don't matter.
scared of lies
but even more scared of truth
I cannot imagine what would happen
if you started speaking in three syllable phrases
like 'I love you'
instead of leave me be.
but that's something that's still waiting to be discovered
and I don't have enough patience or time to stick around
waiting for millions of years to pass.
Author notes
numero 73. prompt: trauma
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A contest entry
- Pick A Number, Any Number. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended September 10, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I no longer feel the bloodrush
in my veins or my heart
after you left me spineless
at the bottom of the pool
I no longer felt any part of my body.
it's been beating after beating
and my head is spinning faster
than your eyes on a day
when I don't matter.
wow I love the play on the word 'beating'
and the pool
haha YAY FOR WATER IMAGERY
love youuu
congrats on gold!! -
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lol i just finished nls the day befoer i wrote this.. so i was thinking abotu being a lifeguard and such hehee
thanks
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-jumping in front of traintracks
just to feel the adrenaline
which never appears
just like the rest of my emotions
that have gone missing
ever since you left.
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WOW. I read those lines and I was just in complete awe. How zah hell do you write like this!? It's amazinggg. I can't even really say in words how much I loved that. hahah. It was incredible.
-scared of lies
but even more scared of truth
I cannot imagine what would happen
if you started speaking in three syllable phrases
like 'I love you'
instead of leave me be.
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Those, too. So original, yet so unique. I love how you put it together & worded it all. It really stood out in your poem. Beautiful Good luck in that contest, love♥
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Okay your word prompt is: trauma
take it wherever you like. Just remember to put the prompt in your AN.
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