asphyxiating on your poetry,
your ink stains my heart,
tricks it into believing your verses,
melodramatic melodies sway me your way,
I'm giving myself away too easily, but how do I stop it?
asphyxiating on your love,
I am at a stop-loss and there is no turning back
all of your promises have pooled,
and I'm teetering at the edge with no life guard for safety
can I trust you? It is all I need, but will surely be my death
A contest entry
- Five PW, One Fresh. by dieu..
800 points, ended June 19, 51 entries
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Ah the question of trust. Too often one person abuses your trust and then you have a hard time trusting someone else. The trick is finding a way to be fairly open without "giving yourself away too easily." Anyhow...It was a good poem. I love the word. Keep up the good work.
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this is amazing
thanks for sharing it with us!
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I think this is excellent. A good job and read! Could not stop reading the page! I was transfixed by the screen! LOL!!!
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I am so looking forward to reading more of your inspiring work!!!! Great ideas fill your mind, apparently!!!! Thanks for sharing this awesome piece. Hope that the rest of your poems are as awesome as this one was! THANKS SO MUCH!!!!
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Swayed by the words that move us, wanting to believe them to be true. Some are, certainly, if one tries for autobiograpoetry(I made up a new word just for you) but sometimes you have to wonder about the person behind the words. Sometimes, you can certainly feel the closeness like what was written poured straight from their heart and other times there is a certain hesitation, like a cold distance... a separation. Could all just be differing styles. but do we ever really know unless we know someone?
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jeez you're amazing..shall you be my sanctuary?
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okay
I love the title you did a fabulous job, cleary you have a very well developed vocabulary and that intelligence becomes useful in poetic literary. keep up the good work.
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Wow! This is deep, and many probably can relate to a similar feeling. I especially love the last line. Great job! Blessings, Patty
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I have felt this feeling before to. I can realte to your words here!
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I love how the poem leaves you hanging instead of ending with a set explaniation, the thoughts of trusting another with anything is hard, with ones heart is harder still espically if its been broken before great work
later
Romeo
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