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A Moment..

Tears flow
as sadness encircles my soft heart,
singing a serenade of

suffocation.

I struggle to breathe

this crushing pressure

of breathless air.

 

Broken hopes escape down my cheek;
a rivulet of sparkling trust
stolen
from a oasis of faithlessness.

 

Eternal despair slackens,

acceptance slowly arises,

beautiful renewal begins.

 

Hope

not to spring eternal

but overwhelmingly radiant,

in that one moment..

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Stevie.me
    December 30, 2008

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    4.45 out of 5

    5 senses - 4 few senses but very powerful
    Metaphors - 4.25
    Feeling- 4.5
    Unity-4.5
    flow-5

    average rating -4.45


  • charmander13
    September 6, 2008

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    Ultimately, love just really, really hurts yeah? Nice poem here


  • Shadow Lynx
    August 30, 2008

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    Inventive, creative and very well written, the more i read it the better it got, best of luck in the contest


  • Missa
    August 30, 2008
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    great! i loved it!


  • parenchma
    August 30, 2008
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    Ck spell line 4th from bottom. Oasis of faithlessness

    Wonderful Oxymoron!

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