it happened on a summer day
with pen in hand the words did play
but soon my poem filled up with bruises
i had way too many muses
the first one wanted it to rhyme
the second, quiet, quoted mime
another erased that into verse
and a big one shouted "BE MORE TERSE!"
i tried to keep up, ideas were passed
should it flow slow or build out fast
when nobody yields everybody loses
i had way too many muses
now i had a headache from their fight
over which was wrong or right
brawling in the back of my mind
the pen fell hard, it wasn't kind
before i could intercept their rage
their thoughts became a scribbled page
all because of their short fuses
i had way too many muses
their voices shrill, my skull did rattle
stopping them in their private battle
why cant you all just get along?!!
one at a time, sing me your song
i'll listen to each theme, every word
then pick one from what i've heard
the poet must be the one who chooses
and there are way too many muses
reluctantly they sat in wait
i evaluated thoughts, small and great
and soon i had a perfect solution
let them each write part in their own execution
so the lot of them got to work by themselves
taking ideas aloft from their shelves
the final product had brilliant word cruises
and just enough muses
Author notes
just something to aMUSE you 
A contest entry
- A Contest for your Muse!!! -- by Florida Sunshine.
450 points, ended September 17, 2008, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come One, Come All - The Circus Is In Town by lowercase prelude.
4000 points, ended October 15, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a really cool writers block poem. I really enjoyed this read.
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This is darling - loved the humorous aspect of the "battle". Great job and congrats on the silver!
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Oh, this certainly a'Mused' me ~ clever write -- and yes, I can see where there 'are' my different muses. I love the whole concept -- that you've set yourself apart from the rest. -- Excellent job!
Thanks so much for entering this in the contest - I loved the meter and flow of this read.... It was a welcome pleasure to read and review your work.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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Your creative imagination never ceases to amaze me. Your voice as each muse and the interaction between yourself and them is marvelous, fascinating.
The only thing that bothers me is the somewhat irregular meter. A poem with such a firm rhyme scheme prepares the ear for a regular number, rise and fall of stresses in each line.
The variation of words in the last 2 renditions of the lines ending with "muses" fill out the content very well. However, variations which have the same number of syllables and pattern of stresses as "i had way too many muses" would seem to contribute to a more even flow and satisfying climax.
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this is fantastic! I love this, totally made me chuckle...your lines flow together so beautifully and I think there's a really honest tone to this, I can relate to having too many muses although, in my case I think there's really only one and she suffers from Multiple Personality Disorder!!! lol
Thanks for sharing this, and all the best in the contest,
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this is a great write. Very cute! I hope you got your muses sorted out lol. keep on writing! and good luck in the contest
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cute, cute!
A few spots that didn't flow as smoothly, but on the whole....nice job with the rhyme and flow.
best wishes in your contest
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I love this, and I know how that feels, haha. Good luck in the contest
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thanx
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awesome, great rhymes and flow! love it
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