I hate your eyes
I hate all you have done
You took my world and turned it round
All you have done makes me die inside
Your eyes made me who i am
Your eyes tuant me
You and your eyes
I hate your eyes
You know what
wait
I don't hate your eyes
i love your eyes
Author notes
Um i think i made this for my dad if it weren't for his eyes he never seen my mom and i wouldn't be here but still he left us becuase of those eyes he made me strong and hopeful
A contest entry
- Titles!!!! by bananasfoster42.
825 points, ended September 1, 2008, 10 entries
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Good Luck in the contest and I rlly like this poem Great Job
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our eyes can lead us in all sorts of directions, some good and others not so much. interesting take on the title, great write!
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I like the way you took this, and then right at the very end, you gave it a twist that made it all turn itself upside down via the authors notes, very cleverly done. Well done, and best of luck in the contest.
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Extremely well done! I wish you had put some of the sentiments of the Author notes as an ending for the poem
You have made a very important discovery about your father's eyes. Be thankful for your strength and new found hopes. Kudos!
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niiiiiceeeeeee i likes it!
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At first I was confused, but then I read the note at the bottom and I totally get it. Nice poem!
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